[FanFic] Proposal [1/?]

[zeenzazada]

Lovino looked fondly over at the other side of the sink. He allowed the kids to swim in it as he did the dishes. The kids- well, turtles - have been living with him for about five months. He was not happy at first about them, but he slowly warmed up to them allowing rare moments of kindness to suddenly appear.

Tck. tck. tck.

Lovino’s head snapped

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[ally_music]

Mou~! The drama! TT__TT

I feel so sorry for Lovi... omg it's the first time that I'm mad on Spain (I feel sorry for him too, but damn it he's the country of passion! If his people can fight bulls and get almost killed by them they can propose too!).

‘Do you have any idea how much I hurt?’

Uhm... English is not my native language but isn't ‘Do you have any idea how much you hurt me?’ a better choice?
The other sentence sounded a bit odd to me.

[zeenzazada]

ahaha, you picked the sentence I debated over. I guess that would be the better choice. Thank you very much!
first Drama fic for me ;o; hard to write.

[akisilver]

While "Do you have any idea how much you hurt me?" is grammatically correct, techinically the other phrase could be used as it does make sense. I'd probably use it, and English is sadly the only language I am fluent in. ^^

[ally_music]

You're welcome. :3

Aww... *patpat* But you did well.

[zeenzazada]

ahaha, that's not what my critiqued said ^^;

but thanks anyways! XD