OMG... so intense a chapter, I should go away and mull awhile before I comment, but I can't not leave my thoughts upon reading this.
It takes a skilled hand to write a scene of chaos so vividly as to not leave the reader saying, dazedly, "Huh?" You accomplish that, and then some. You shine a light on every murky corner of the stage, and no one goes unnoticed, no action goes unobserved.
To describe this chapter as brilliant is to sell it short, but "brilliant" is the best I can muster up at this hour. Thank you for keeping my heart racing!
Well thanks muchly! I really do appreciate that since I did ‘cheat’ a tad in the last chapter by having Sam observe it all. I really did want to convey chaos, and the fact they are really just scrambling about making it up as they go along and that any cohesive plan just isn’t even… well, just *isn’t*. And so it’s actually a huge mistake that they actually succeed, because they’re really stumbling from one snaafu to the next.
You know, the great thing about readers who review WIPs [and I know a lot of people don’t] is that in my case they really inspire me to raise my game, because when they say they thought something was good I end up in a total panic about how the heck I can live up to their expectations for the next chapter. I honestly thought that everyone would feel that everything following C18 would be anticlimactic by comparison, but all of you have really kicked me in the ass to keep up the good work! :-D
I’m particularly proud of that! It’s so deliciously gory! It’s one of the very first ideas I had for this story, along with the idea of the wendigo parroting back the attacks and then turning out to be the original Gabe Bender…
Ahh. What a ride! I need to catch my breath. It's late but I couldn't not read, not when it was right there waiting for me. The writing is superb as usual. Woman, what you do with words is magic.
There would be too much too pull out so again I'm limiting to just one tiny part: "And Christ he wants out of here, he thinks, as he puts Sam’s hands on the rungs, he wants out of this open grave, wants to stand under that sun, bask in its golden rays, and fuck skin cancer because he’s damn well going into the light and taking his boys with him no matter how much Dean pinks up and peels."
--- *taking his boys with him ...* They are so his boys after all this and of course all along ... just, sob.
Awww, thank you sweetie! I nearly fell off my chair when I saw 20+ reviews here and at FF… I was convinced I’d only get feedback from my European minions, due to it being Thanksgiving weekend! :-D
I really think that Bobby, with the whole parental vibe he has going, would just want to sweep them up and race somewhere safe with them and I most definitely wanted to include Sam in that. You know I am thinking a lot about the next story in this verse, which will be S4 post-Hell, and dreading writing it in some ways because it will be so, so different between the brothers… :-O
I never could do math [hence I write for a living] but even I managed to work out that having them still in the pit at 5000 words meant another chapter! I seem to have no ability whatsoever when it comes to predicting how long these stories will be… I thought both would be 10-12 chapters but they seem to have become monsters along the way. Next one definitely the last though!
OH NOES!!! What's wrong with Dean?! I'm so happy they ALL made it out of that pit alive, but there is something wrong with Dean! Hasn't the poor boy been through enough? (Not that I'm complaining ;D) I'm just so elated that they are all alive, if not well. And it was Dean that ended the Bendigo!!! Yay for use of his silver ring! Awesome way to make it completely relevant! But why oh why did you have to end it there? Now we all have to wait a week to find out what's wrong with Dean! *pulls hair out in frustration*
Oh, poor Dean… in story about now he looks just like your avatar only a tad bloodier. There is a little clue as to what is wrong with him earlier in story… prepare for lots of hospital vigil schmoop in the final chapter!
One of my very first ideas for this story was that Dean would kill the wendigo using his ring, though I did wonder if having him punch his hand into its heart might be a tad too gory. But no - not only are we Dean Grrrrls sick puppies, but it seems we are also total whores for ruthless!Dean. Yowzah!
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It takes a skilled hand to write a scene of chaos so vividly as to not leave the reader saying, dazedly, "Huh?" You accomplish that, and then some. You shine a light on every murky corner of the stage, and no one goes unnoticed, no action goes unobserved.
To describe this chapter as brilliant is to sell it short, but "brilliant" is the best I can muster up at this hour. Thank you for keeping my heart racing!
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You know, the great thing about readers who review WIPs [and I know a lot of people don’t] is that in my case they really inspire me to raise my game, because when they say they thought something was good I end up in a total panic about how the heck I can live up to their expectations for the next chapter. I honestly thought that everyone would feel that everything following C18 would be anticlimactic by comparison, but all of you have really kicked me in the ass to keep up the good work! :-D
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There would be too much too pull out so again I'm limiting to just one tiny part: "And Christ he wants out of here, he thinks, as he puts Sam’s hands on the rungs, he wants out of this open grave, wants to stand under that sun, bask in its golden rays, and fuck skin cancer because he’s damn well going into the light and taking his boys with him no matter how much Dean pinks up and peels."
--- *taking his boys with him ...* They are so his boys after all this and of course all along ... just, sob.
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I really think that Bobby, with the whole parental vibe he has going, would just want to sweep them up and race somewhere safe with them and I most definitely wanted to include Sam in that. You know I am thinking a lot about the next story in this verse, which will be S4 post-Hell, and dreading writing it in some ways because it will be so, so different between the brothers… :-O
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I still loved every minute of it. :D
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One of my very first ideas for this story was that Dean would kill the wendigo using his ring, though I did wonder if having him punch his hand into its heart might be a tad too gory. But no - not only are we Dean Grrrrls sick puppies, but it seems we are also total whores for ruthless!Dean. Yowzah!
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