Beta?

[zannes]

I need someone to take a look at a short 3,000+ word story I wrote. It's a short piece about mermen - I tweaked a previous short piece and need to know if the story makes sense in this more remote context. It needs the usual - general plot, grammar/spelling, etc. There are a few purposeful grammar mistakes in speech due to POV, but it's nothing too annoying, I hope. Anyone willing to take a look?

I appreciate the help!