Comments | ysabetwordsmith: Poem: "Conquests and Competitions"

ysabetwordsmith

Poem: "Conquests and Competitions"

Aug 11, 2013 21:05

This poem came out of the February 5, 2013 Poetry Fishbowl. It was inspired by prompts from wyld_dandelyon and ravan. It has been selected in an audience poll as the free epic for the August 6, 2013 Poetry Fishbowl reaching the $200 goal. This poem belongs to the series The Steamsmith.

( Full steam ahead ... )

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Comments 15

thnidu August 12 2013, 03:09:37 UTC

I can't wait (well, yes, I must) to see.

Well... ysabetwordsmith August 12 2013, 06:55:53 UTC

You can always prompt for more.

Re: Well... technoshaman August 12 2013, 10:47:04 UTC

if he doesn't, I will. I wanna see him get his comeuppance...

Re: Well... ysabetwordsmith August 13 2013, 07:17:58 UTC

Everyone is welcome to pitch in with prompts. I'm kind of amused by how many people want to see George get his arse kicked here.

ravan August 12 2013, 05:41:47 UTC

I hope she toasts his ass.

*laugh* ysabetwordsmith August 12 2013, 06:54:06 UTC

Why, you vindictive little fan, you!

Next theme up is "Conflict Resolution" on September 2. I'm actually expecting this storyline to take a while to resolve, because it's not a simple contest. But feel free to prompt for more of this if you're enjoying it.

Re: *laugh* technoshaman August 12 2013, 10:49:04 UTC

*nods* people don't change their whole worldview easily. Besides, he's looking at a massive reduction in the number of people he can call "servant".

Re: *laugh* ysabetwordsmith August 13 2013, 02:28:05 UTC

>> *nods* people don't change their whole worldview easily. <<

Yes, that's true. George is looking at massive cognitive dissonance.

>> Besides, he's looking at a massive reduction in the number of people he can call "servant". <<

Also a good point, in terms of general categories, though his family has no trouble affording decent help.

I just love Maryam! zianuray August 12 2013, 13:41:44 UTC

"What competition to do propose?" Is it possible this should be "do you propose?" If not, what is this structure called, please,so I can learn about it?

Re: I just love Maryam! ysabetwordsmith August 12 2013, 17:11:48 UTC

That's a typo, and it's fixed now.

rhodielady_47 August 13 2013, 00:22:54 UTC

Now this is going to be an interesting poem cycle!
I look forward to reading the next one in this series.
:)

Yay! ysabetwordsmith September 1 2013, 07:18:34 UTC

I'm happy to hear that.

siege August 13 2013, 00:52:24 UTC

The smallest phos lantern, with that world's alchemy?

I'd start with peridot, actually. Peridot above and ruby below, with quartz lenses on the sides and onyx wood between. Inject a slow stream of aer across the ruby, while a stream of pyra comes in through the peridot. Charge it with a hand-crank spinning a rod of amber against wool, leading to a gold tip within the lantern where the reaction should occur.

siege August 13 2013, 00:53:20 UTC

A similar lantern can probably be made using ge and phos, but it's probably a bit more dangerous.

Thank you! ysabetwordsmith September 10 2013, 07:39:05 UTC

I used your ideas in " Turning the Crank."