Comments | ysabetwordsmith: Poem: "Hens and Flowers"

ysabetwordsmith

Poem: "Hens and Flowers"

Jun 22, 2012 11:22

This poem came out of the June 19, 2012 Poetry Fishbowl. It was inspired and sponsored by rix_scaedu. You can explore Swedish flower hens and pytt i panna online. This poem belongs to the Hart's Farm series, for which more information appears on the Serial Poetry page.

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siege June 22 2012, 19:24:40 UTC

Oh, just like hens to lay in every corner they can find, especially if it's hard to get to!

And I like the flowers at the end. :)

Yes... ysabetwordsmith June 23 2012, 00:50:56 UTC

>>Oh, just like hens to lay in every corner they can find, especially if it's hard to get to!<<

They like to find warm places, or hidden places, which can sometimes be pesky. But when they're free-range you don't have to feed them much grain and they eat pests.

>> And I like the flowers at the end. :) <<

The art of happiness lies in seeing the beauty around you, even when you're looking for some other thing.

ellenmillion June 22 2012, 23:36:30 UTC

Pretty!

Thank you! ysabetwordsmith June 23 2012, 01:11:05 UTC

I'm glad you like this. I like the flower hens -- they remind me of the millefiori chickens from Italy (which also means "many flowers").

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Yay! ysabetwordsmith June 23 2012, 00:59:21 UTC

It makes me happy when readers feel that a poem matches the tone of its source culture. I aim for that as best I can.

je_reviens July 3 2012, 18:09:49 UTC

As I read this series, I think about smells and how what seems to smell ok to these characters would make me wretch.

A bunch of people working on a farm, living together, none of them wearing deodorant, and all really needing it. And in the summer - ugh!

A girl climbing into a manure pile and stirring the shit around while wearing her GOOD sweater. I've taught laundry programs to Girl Scouts. Cleaning clothes is HARD work, and when your wool sweater smells like shit, super UGH.

je_reviens July 3 2012, 18:10:21 UTC

I like this series and this is a good story/poem. Just my thoughts, above, as I read it.

je_reviens July 3 2012, 18:10:50 UTC

PS your poems dont seem like poems to me. They seem like stories with really short lines of text. Hence, story poems.

Thoughts ysabetwordsmith July 3 2012, 23:36:41 UTC

Some of my poems are narrative poems. I write -- barely, because I don't like straight prose poems -- the full spectrum from poetry to prose. Some people feel that my free-verse poems read like poetry, others feel they read like prose. I do write differently in poetry than in prose, but sometimes the differences are more subtle than others.

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helgatwb April 10 2014, 05:07:20 UTC

My family had a rooster just like that when I was a child. He was very beautiful, but mean as a snake.

There's a name for my favorite breakfast! Yay! I make hash browns with onions and ham, and put fried egg on top, I just called it breakfast.

I love this series.

Yes... ysabetwordsmith April 10 2014, 05:11:12 UTC

>> My family had a rooster just like that when I was a child. He was very beautiful, but mean as a snake. <<

So did we. I needed a broom to fend him off when I went to gather eggs. He was, at the time, nearly as tall as I was.

>> There's a name for my favorite breakfast! Yay! I make hash browns with onions and ham, and put fried egg on top, I just called it breakfast. <<

There are many breakfast skillet dishes, tasty things.

>> I love this series. <<

Thank you! I'm happy to hear that.

Feel free to request more at any relevant prompt call. Next up is the crowdfunding Creative Jam on March 19-20 with a theme of "characterization."