Comments | ysabetwordsmith: Poem: "Knifewalking"

ysabetwordsmith

Poem: "Knifewalking"

Aug 04, 2011 00:30

This poem came out of the August 2, 2011 Poetry Fishbowl. It was inspired by a prompt from Dreamwidth user ailelie, who wanted a version of the fairytale in which the Little Mermaid leaves the sea not for love, but for reasons of her own. I love subverting fairytales like that. The poem is cosponsored by ailelie and laffingkat.

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Comments 16

fayanora August 4 2011, 06:28:14 UTC

Cool idea. Great poem. :-)

Thank you! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 06:42:59 UTC

I'm glad you like it.

laffingkat August 4 2011, 06:32:53 UTC

Thank you. This really resonates with me. It's very satisfying to make friends with your pain and learn how to use it.

You're welcome! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 06:42:17 UTC

We choose our own companions as we move through life. I have another poem somewhere about Fear and Death as an astronauts companions. Huh ... I often write positive renditions of Death, because it's such a thankless job. But now it occurs to me that Pain is probably even more unpopular than Death.

Re: You're welcome! laffingkat August 4 2011, 07:27:51 UTC

Perhaps I'm odd, but I've always felt comfortable with Death. My initial reaction to Pain though was to try to avoid it, then ignore it, suppress it, or get rid of it. But Pain has an important purpose, and I've learned that it can be both friend and teacher. Granted, my relationship with Pain still isn't entirely comfortable, but I'm not sure any of my relationships are. :) Now if I can just make friends with Fear and Anger too...

Re: You're welcome! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 17:45:50 UTC

Hmm ... you could try using similar techniques with Fear as you use for Pain. They are both warnings.

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Thank you! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 17:43:46 UTC

I really appreciate the feedback. It's good to know that this poem works for people who have personal experience with pain.

aldersprig August 4 2011, 13:08:30 UTC

My. Moving, painful, and well-told.

Thank you! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 17:38:00 UTC

*hugs* This is good to hear.

eseme August 4 2011, 13:55:29 UTC

In many ways, this makes more sense than the original. And I like the ending better.

Very well written.

Wow! ysabetwordsmith August 4 2011, 17:07:10 UTC

>>In many ways, this makes more sense than the original. And I like the ending better.<<

That is so cool.