Comments | yoshilei: Smoking Game

yoshilei

Smoking Game

Jan 19, 2011 22:33

Title: Smoking Game
Chapter: N/A
Author: YoshiLei
Rating: PG-13
Band(s): Gazette
Pairing(s): Aoi x Ruki
Syn: Drabble
Warning(s): Some swearing, references to male sex.
Disclaimer: Purely a work of fiction.

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aoi, the gazette, ruki

Comments 8

liedxxx January 20 2011, 04:44:23 UTC

That. Was. Beautiful.
:D

yoshilei January 20 2011, 07:46:08 UTC

O///O
Thankyou so much,i was a little dissapointed with it but as long as someone enjoyed it i'm very pleased.
Thankyou for reading and commenting!
xox <3

fa_ying June 19 2011, 15:22:12 UTC

that was really beautiful, i liked the atmosphere very much
thank you for sharing!

yoshilei June 19 2011, 15:52:56 UTC

I douht very much i deserve such a lovely compliment but i'm so greatful to receive it. It's a pleasure the share and thank you for reading and commenting.

xox

cateris June 19 2011, 17:20:53 UTC

*added to memories*

although I'll ignore the ‘’ You’re a good fuck Ruki, I knew you wouldn’t disappoint.’’

My truth, and the version I saw in this, stopped at ‘’Don’t worry …we can act like nothing...ever happened.’’. For this piece I think it's rather cheap the way you ended it with the ruthless notion of Aoi telling him he was a quick fuck and that he knew he wouldn't disappoint. Just my opinion.

I would also like to add that I really liked your style, almost close to literature in a way. Thumbs up for that <3

yoshilei June 19 2011, 17:58:46 UTC

I would thank you for your critique if it weren’t based on the biased notion that you think my work is ''cheap'' because you think i made Aoi too ruthless. That was after all my intention for him to be a painful memory for Ruki in this particular story so I can only apologise that it wasn’t your taist.

cadaver_maxx June 19 2011, 20:24:10 UTC

That was a nice distraction from my life.
I actually liked it. I'm glad that Ruki kind of picked himself up after the painful memory.
It's also really well written and it caught my attention from the first words.
How you described the action of smoking: Amazing!
Thank you for sharing!

yoshilei June 19 2011, 22:21:30 UTC

To hear someone thinks it’s well written honestly means a lot. Reading and writing is always a great escape for me and I’m glad I could provide it for someone else, I’m happy to share on the chance someone will enjoy what I produce.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
xox