Death Note Fanfic!

[yma2]

Going to Bangor for a few days to celebrate my birthday, meet friends and run a Trigun game. I've been planning this game for ages, I hope it goes well...

At any rate, I'll be back next week. I was kinda hoping to do a Death Note Fanfic, and what do you know I sorta managed it!
This is hot off the press. I would have asked someone like user to beta

Comments

[cheesymonkey]

I really liked it. Awesome to the max. I was wondering how you'd do with writing L, who seems to me like he'd be rather difficult to put to paper (or computer screen). In any case, you did a great job and L (as well as Light's) characterization was right on the money.
A few type-os here and there. Like:
"Approximately seven on the List is L’s hygiene, or lack of it.
Hygene (should be hygiene) is a preliminary matter for L. Light thinks he would hardly wash at all if it were not for the insistences of Watari and, now, Light himself."
Also, this little paragraph of sorts here switched to past tense when the rest of your fic is in present.
"Light likes to think he had mirror eyes, eyes which showed people whatever they wished to see, or whatever he wants them to see. But L’s eyes were merely holes in his skull. They hardly widen or narrow with pain or surprise, don’t sparkle with amusement or dim with pain."
I really loved how you described L's eating habits too. Very cool.
And the whole idea of Light having a Death List now that he's without a Death Note was funny.
I hope you'll get another itch to write Death Note fanfiction again soon.

[yma2]

Thanks so much for the review, and the corrections. If I put this up anywhere else I'll make a few changes.
Actually I found writing L relitivly easy, it's Light that I find tough to write he's so... difficult, at this stage.
I do have an idea or two for other DN fics and hopefully I'll get them down soonish. I hope you can review them when I do, feedback is always wonderful!