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Without A Trace Masterpost

Jul 27, 2012 14:49

Title: Without A Trace
Author: yassharrar
Artist: apieceofcake
Beta: My wonderful Daughter Yasmin
Rating: NC17
Pairing: J2
Genre: RPS AU

Summery: Thirteen years ago Jared's parent's and sister disappeared never to be seen again and from the moment that Jensen fell in love with him seven years later he has wished with all of his heart for Jared to get closure and find peace. ( Read more... )

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Comments 11

ramona4jake July 27 2012, 15:36:27 UTC

the art is beautiful, and the story sounds more than interesting ! any chance for a pdf ? my eyes are bad, cannot read too much on laptop....

yassharrar July 29 2012, 10:20:48 UTC

As soon as I have one I will put it up Hun

Humaira

yamisadomazo July 27 2012, 16:25:16 UTC

I know it might be bad form to offer a criticism right off the bat, but since it's your first fic ever, I thought constructive criticism might be welcome.

I noticed right away with your summary (which was spelled incorrectly), that there was no punctuation used. Your Summary is what initially grabs people and makes them say, 'God, I really want to read this story!' So I would suggest making sure that, in the future, you work on your approach with those.

Also, having a Beta reader is a wonderful tool when it comes to worrying about grammar, punctuation, and other aspects to storytelling. If you use a beta, he or she could warn you of run-on sentences, misspellings, or any other number of mistakes that can be made during the writing process that I see you made from reading your first few paragraphs.

I am not telling you these things to discourage you from writing; on the contrary, I hope you continue to do so and learn from your first attempt at story telling.

Good luck to you!

yassharrar July 29 2012, 10:15:38 UTC

Thanks for the comments and it is not bad form it actually helps me so that I know what to do next time and can become more confident.

Humaira

PDF ishipsterek July 27 2012, 17:59:01 UTC

Hi I was wondering if you had an PDF for this fic because I want to read it so bad and if you could email it to me at awesomeassfics@yahoo.com
please and thank you!

bidet_of_evil July 27 2012, 18:32:04 UTC

Yes, pdf please. I can help you make one if you like.

Edition #2,286 livejournal July 29 2012, 09:32:01 UTC

User simplybeing referenced to your post from Edition #2,286 saying: [...] by (Jensen/Jared, R) Without A Trace [...]

Re: Edition #2,286 yassharrar July 29 2012, 10:16:33 UTC

Thanks for this Hun

Humaira