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A Decade Past (Yellow, Goh/Taki)

Feb 14, 2007 17:15

Title: A Decade Past
Fandom: Yellow
Pairing: Goh/Taki
Author: Pyren aka gryvon
Recipient: Lucy Schwarz aka ele5
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Summary: Goh and Taki, ten years later.

( The key turned easily in the lock... )

Comments 7

shayheyred February 14 2007, 22:57:59 UTC

How charmingly domestic. That pair is still hot after all these years!~

anonymous February 14 2007, 22:58:06 UTC

Thank you very much! ♥

I love the homey feeling in the fic. Also, this sentence:

Taki would kill him if he knew Goh thought of Taki as his wife.

absolutely killed me. Because, yes. Taki would. And Goh so would thought so, still.

I also like the idea of Taki still telling Goh that he can wait and slipping from Goh's grip, but still cursing when the timer goes off. That's somehow so him.

I love the details of life together, the photos, the sofa, everything.

Thank you! ♥

Love,
Lucy Schwarz

gamera February 14 2007, 23:00:21 UTC

Oh, this story is lovely! The quiet, slice-of-life quality to it is so nice, and I love how the two have developed over the course of ten years-- quite believable for them.

raphaella_x February 15 2007, 00:24:04 UTC

Very well written, it was easy to read and flowed smoothly. I'd love to read something longer from you ;)

lirren February 15 2007, 00:34:26 UTC

Oh, that was really quite lovely. I really liked the peek into the future for these two.

His smile widened as he passed the picture of him and Taki on top of the TV. They had been younger when the picture was taken, but no less happy. They'd been in the park for the cherry blossom festival and had finally managed to sneak away from Kanji and the others for a moment. Kanji had caught them under one of the cherry trees and taken the picture without them realizing he was there. There wasn't much to the picture, just Goh with his hand on Taki's cheek, but it was one of the best presents Kanji had ever given them.

That was my favorite part. I'd love to see an artist draw the picture of Taki and Goh under the sakura. And I laughed at the thought that I was so proud of Kanji for being quiet long enough to snap the picture! All in all, a wonderful ficlet. I can't wait to find out who you are!