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here is a fictional narative on my friend dailyn. the story is she was a semi-famous actress or model who had her 15 mins of fame and now has nothing. she doesnt realize this and tries to go to an actors/models party but they wont let her in, so she comes back home, gets drunk, does some drugs and passes out or dies (not sure how i want to end it
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here's my run down:
(the one's left blank are because I have nothing in particular to say about them... not that it's bad)
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2. blurry :(
3. I never realized how small the door frame was- kind of makes her look like a gargantuan woman.
4. hot. really hawt
5. looks a bit forced
6. again looks a bit forced
7. I like it, I like that you can see the mattress- makes it look like she tore the room apart
8. looks a bit odd... isn't the best shot of dai. everything else is fine but Dai looks a little... off
9. love it! love it!
10. you nailed this one too, love it!
11. it's a good angle but the set up is a bit fake. I don't know if other people would notice it or only former drug addicts- but for a more real look I'll help ya out ;) lol
12. help I've fallen and I can't get up!
13. adorable! that's the cutest shot... like she's pissed out of her mind looking at the bottle.
14. would've been better had the cap been off and even a little bit spilled onto the sheet... it's hard to believe she'd pass out with a bottle in her hand with the cap still on. you could 'stain' the sheet by pouring some grape juice on a scrap of fabric the same color, letting it dry, and then hiding the edges in the folds of the blanket
15. is this her dead? hmm... did you do something with her makeup to make it look like the 1970s dawn of the dead?
and if you think that's a bit harsh take into consideration that it's 'constructive' criticism and that most of the one's I found something wrong with weren't in the actual photography (besides the blurry one) but in some of the aspects that you tried to capture that you may have not had the most experience with.
the 'special effects'
and that's what I'm here for.
good work though!
and I figured you posted not just to hear "that's awesome keep it up" because some of them are I just... I'm just babbling to justify my critiquing...
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that was exactly what I was going for XD. As for the bottle not being open, I didn't want to spill my dad's rum (I want to live you know) and I didn't want to stain the sheets.
I'm sure shannon will appreciate the criticism.
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it was kind of hard to make some of the shots look "natural" because she had to hold the pose in some shots for half a second....and the first few are blurry because i didnt bring a shutter release cable so when i hit the button to take the picture i shook the tripod :/
and for the last one..we didnt do anything to her makeup. aabout half way through we smudged it like crazy, but thats it :)
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