Desires, Part 3

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This is the third chapter of Desires, which is the third in the series that began with Plans and Decisions. Chapter One is here. Chapter Two is here.

Intercontinental beta-ing above and beyond the call of duty - and probably well beyond the definition of "beta-ing" for that matter - by the peripatetic

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[specialj67]

You know, in all of the fic I've read in this fandom, a lot of it has been angsty "how Brian and Justin deal (or not) with the bashing" type stuff. And after reading so much of it, it's hard to come at it from a different angle or put a fresh spin on it. So when you introduced the possibility of this rehashing, I wasn't exactly jazzed, but I was willing to see where you were going with it. I'm glad my initial reservations were proved wrong. First, I like the whole thing with Daphne wanting to interview them for her research thingy. It's easy to forget that Daphne was part of that night too because we didn't see here there right when the bashing happened. It affected her as much as everyone else in their group, probably only second to Jennifer and Brian. I like the way you're approaching this with Daphne initiating things--it's something that's not as common as other methods/devices used in other stories. Second, the part where Brian actually heard Justin talking about the bashing in the radio interview was very moving and illuminating with respect to Brian's frame of mind about the whole thing. Justin has found some kind of way to be able to talk about it without completely shutting down or losing it--a lot of that probably has to do with the fact that pretty much all he knows of it he heard from Daphne and Brian. But I found it very interesting that Brian was so surprised that Justin could talk about it in such a detached manner when he himself can still only barely manage to think about it, much less talk about it out loud.

“How did they bring them back?”

“Remember the Governor, from the planet where JT and Rage went to get married?”

“Sure, Rage had him put on a penal world.”

“It was a minimum security penal world, for white collar intergalactic criminals.”

“Naturally.”

“He busted out, along with some mad scientist imprisoned there, who knew how to re-animate the dead.”

Emmett nodded sympathetically. “I hate when that happens.”

I had to agree.

And it's very interesting with the whole bringing back Rage's enemies thing you're doing. I'm am very curious to see where you are going to take this. This particular passage was very funny with the plot devices used to get Rage's enemies out, so I was definitely laughing, but I can imagine how unsettled Brian might feel about Justin and Michael rehashing that stuff again.

Okay, with that out of my system, there was also much to laugh about in this chapter.

“What?”

“You miss me when I’m not there.”

Silence.

“You hate sleeping without me.”

He gave a little huff.

I lifted up on my elbow and looked at him. “You so love me. You can’t even sleep without me anymore. I’m going to give you ten blowjobs for that.”

Brian smiled.

Guh, the cuteness of that was almost too much! But teh love--and humor!

Each grid converged so slightly you practically didn’t notice it until you saw both paintings next to each other, drawing the eye to a different area in each painting. I wanted to see all four of them together so much I almost couldn’t concentrate on anything else.

Brian was staring at them, and kind of frowning. “What?”

He shook his head. “They’re great. I want them.”

“I told you, you can have first refusal on anything I paint. But I have to have them for the show. And you’ll have to buy them from Armand, I have a contract.”

“I know.” He stood there looking, and then sighed. “Justin, you need to work on these. Can’t you get an extension on the comic?”

I lovedlovedloved that whole scene in Justin's studio where they were looking at Justin's WIP. I love it when authors actually go in to some detail about Justin's art rather than mentioning it for the sake of reminding the audience for the bazillionth time that Justin is an artiste. I love Justin for having this desire to finish this thing he started, for wanting to see it finished so badly just so he can realize his creative vision. I love Brian for encouraging him and wanting to Justin push himself artistically. Just....yeah, thanks for putting in that extra detail--your audience thanks you for it.

I guess that's all I can think of...for now. This totally made my day, even if it did get rilly rilly angsty at the end. :)

[xie_xie_xie]

Let me start where you ended, with "this totally made my day." Because your feedback totally made my day. THANK YOU! You hit on so many things that were really integral to my vision of this story. You made me very happy.

I love imagining Justin's paintings.

[specialj67]

I love imagining Justin's paintings.

Me too--although after reading your descriptions in the story, I wish I could see them in RL.!