Plans

[xie_xie_xie]

Plans
By Xie

My first fiction ... be gentle. This is part one, there will be three parts. They will come quickly. This story is told in alternating points of view, and one of them is somewhat unusual. I ask you to trust me. I promise it will be ok.

This is an angst-free zone. It is post-513 therapy for us all.

With many thanks to my hot Italian beta

Comments

[dreambee3]

I came via a rec by Alice - and I must go back and thank her for it!

It was a lovely surprise to get a great new post-513 fic by a great new author. Excellent writing, a wonderful flow and pace, and it got me hooked immediately. You captured Brian and Justin's voices and traits so well, and covered so much feeling of their year apart. For the first time since forever, I enjoyed listening to Mel - so you have achieved something extraordinary there!

I love - so many things. I love the idea of The Plan, the blank emails were genius as only Justin can do genius, and Brian sending one during Justin's three days of silence was pretty special too. I love that their relationship has been continuing strongly with surprise visits by Justin - that Brian was home, alone, every single time - and that they had the time to themselves, no-one knew. I love your dialogue, you do it so well, and the sex wasn't too bad either! You write it hot, and loving - the look you described in Brian’s eyes was beautiful:

"I laughed a little, and turned my head and caught him smiling. There was a look on his face, a look I almost never saw, like something really good was happening, that he never thought would. …… Then he caught me looking at his eyes. And they changed. And got dark and locked onto mine."

Wonderful work, thank you, I’ll look forward to the next chapters (in fact, I'll be friending you if you don’t mind so as to get them hot off the press).

[xie_xie_xie]

I'm so happy that you liked it, and you picked some of my favorite things about it, too. I'm happy that everyone either likes or accepts the Melanie POV, it was just something that got into my head and wouldn't get out.

I love Justin's plan too. I think it would work.

And thank you for friending me, since I've discovered I'm a feedback slut, I'm glad I'm getting all these new friends.

More is coming very soon. If I can stop reading my feedback and squeeing and thanking everyone. *is insane*