New Fic: First Time for Everything (6/10): NC-17: B/J

Jul 02, 2007 18:33

Before I get into the fic, I'd like to send a very belated thank you to all the folks that sent me love at the QAF love meme a few weeks back. I'm sometimes out of the loop on these things, so apologies for the late response, but I want you guys to know how much it means to me and how much I truly appreciated it. It's that kind of generosity of ( Read more... )

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testdog65 July 3 2007, 02:23:45 UTC
Incredibly hot and filled with amazing imagery. But what I liked just as much was Brian taking care of and guiding Justin through the entire story. No matter how horny and ready Justin thinks he might be for the baths, Brian understands how potentially overwhelming the experience can be, both before and after.

Your description of the baths as they arrived was so rich with sensation and anticipation. I really felt what Justin must have been experiencing. And I liked the way that you contrasted the current situation with the back room at Babylon for perspective:

The party belongs to everyone. It feels different. Open and unifying and freeing. Shameless and provocative and exhilarating.

I truly got the sense from this that the baths are not about any one particular experience or person, not about who’s the hottest or the best, but simply about feeling and sensation, desire and pleasure. I loved the way that you conveyed all of that, while at the same time giving us Brian and Justin together and sharing the experience with each other.

Such a perfect ending:

You know how to talk to him now, without saying a word.

Of all the things you learned tonight, you think that was the most important.

As always, this was exceptional, and I enjoyed every word! Now you’ll have to excuse me whilst I go melt into a little puddle!

~Ellen

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xhaleslowly July 3 2007, 03:49:19 UTC
Many many thanks, Ellen :) And I'm relieved that you felt the distinction between the experience in the backroom and the experience at the baths. This fic proved to be more of a challenge for me as I was so wanting to avoid repetition from the previous fics, but it was difficult as the "set up" is so similar. That's honestly why it took me so long to write - I was just stuck on it for weeks and weeks. It was only these last few days that it finally came together for me and I was able to get across the sense that I wanted to.

And the end - thank you especially for your comments about it. I sat here for about half an hour tonight debating whether or not I was happy with the ending, wondering if I should sit on it for another few days or just post. But I finally came to the conclusion that it was what it was supposed to be. I appreciate your reassurance that I made the right decision with it :)

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