Be my Critics!!!
This is Part II to the poem I wrote a few entrys ago. The last one was Fall, this one is Winter. Let me know what you think. And if you could correct my spelling too that be awesome. Just don't correct puncuation...there is none and that's how it's suppossed to be. So don't fix that. Besides that you can tear it to shreds.
Here goes:
I remember snowy winter nights
laying by the crackling fire
huddled under a think blanket
With mugs of hot chocolate
as snowflakes dance and swirl
falling down to the frozen ground
Scritchy mittens and sweaters and scarves,
frolicking through freshly fallen flurries
soaking in the cold while tumbling,
rolling across the snow
laughter rising up into the air
a winter wonderland made for two
and icicles hang from doorways
that shelter bodies numb from the cold
as icy lips brush in a feather light kiss.
Let me know what you think.
Should I even continue on to Spring??
Here goes:
I remember snowy winter nights
laying by the crackling fire
huddled under a think blanket
With mugs of hot chocolate
as snowflakes dance and swirl
falling down to the frozen ground
Scritchy mittens and sweaters and scarves,
frolicking through freshly fallen flurries
soaking in the cold while tumbling,
rolling across the snow
laughter rising up into the air
a winter wonderland made for two
and icicles hang from doorways
that shelter bodies numb from the cold
as icy lips brush in a feather light kiss.
Let me know what you think.
Should I even continue on to Spring??