Story 196: "The Lure of the Fox" by Caroline O'Callaghan

[wendelah1]

This week's story was nominated by badforthefish. Go Fish!

The Lure of the Fox
By Caroline O'Callaghan
Rating: NC-17 I suppose, but it's nothing too bad (not sure what she means by that...I guess we'll have to wait and see.)
Classification: Mulder/Scully Romance. Mulder and Scully pursue a serial killer who calls himself 'The Fox

Comments

[wendelah1]

I just can't see Scully referring to herself as a "pathetic nerd," even in her private thoughts. Maybe when she was a teenager she might think that. Maybe. But this just felt unrealistic to me. Also, why would Scully worry that a guy who's dedicated his life to proving the existence of extraterrestrials, and who hangs out with a trio of computer geeks, would think she's a "pathetic nerd"?

LOL

Yeah, I think Scully has a better sense of her value as a person as well as her attractiveness to men than that.

The most OOC thing to me was how much time they spent thinking about how attractive the other person was. They've been working together for four years. Surely they've worked this out already. Maybe you have to write as well as Tesla to pull this kind of thing off.

Is Mulder an exaggerated version of Mulder? He's clumsily written, that's for sure. He seems rude in an immature way, maybe, rather than a Mulderish way?

Many things about this fic are making me think it might have been written by someone who's fairly young, or at least not an accomplished writer. The poor punctuation and spelling mistakes tell us it wasn't beta-read.