Devil Ride 2/?

[xenalvr]

Title: Devil Ride

Comments

[laniecroft]

Great story idea. Somehow it reminds me a little bit of Pretty Woman. I can't wait were you're going with that one, but knowing some of the stuff you wrote I pretty sure it's gonna be an awesome road you take us.
I like Natalias first impression of Olivia, like Olivia walks in like the owned the place hehehe how right you are :-)
Thecar ride was great to read and I like that you wrote the first two chapters for Natalias point of view, still I hope you will change that at some point, I really want to know if picking up a street worker was a one time thing for Olivia.

[xenalvr]

hey you, thanks for that! I'm looking forward to this ride as much as you are... probably more so! it's been a while eh. :) and yes, I do remember how much you like Olivia's confidence, heh.

[korenap]

Your writing is evocative. Great tension and the perfect amount of description.

[xenalvr]

thank you! fingers crossed it never gets dreary :)

[harper_m]

Very intriguing. A couple of small things - I think you mean tenor instead of tenure, and using 'accosted' here feels out of sync with the tone. Accosting someone is an aggressive thing. Soliciting maybe?

I look forward to more.

[xenalvr]

hey, cheers for pointing that out, I've made the changes :)

[anonymous]

I am kind of ashamed of the fact that I like this Natalia is a hooker and Olivia a John fic. Such a totally different world for them. Awesome.

[xenalvr]

oh, don't be ashamed. after all, it's born of *my* mind... ha!

[tanama30]

great story so far and update. i can't wait to see this play out. update soon

[xenalvr]

thank you! and I'll try to write as fast as I can :)