Hope the pace of the story is okay! I worry about people finding it draggy but when I read it over, it's still gripping me, so... fingers crossed that my readers are feeling the same way!
For some reason, I have some really good visuals of this love scene, can't really say why ;)
Things are starting to move into another realm I sense Jack is going to be trouble. Thing is Russell is rather volatile, I hope he doesn't get in trouble defending their honor. Poor Kristen is so in love and so happy thinking how great her life is and then this ass ruins her day. I wonder if her brother is truly sorry or just making up stuff to get what he wants.
Frances finally seems to be on the same page and completely devoted which is nice to see. And Isobel and Nell flirting? Good, get them both out of the way!
Frances finally seems to be on the same page and completely devoted which is nice to see.
Frances and Nell is really modelled after my ex and I; I was writing the next part of the story today and got to a point where I tried to explain F&N's relationship and how it worked... it was really difficult! Because really, the only thing different between F&N and F&K is that K makes F feel all the stuff that N doesn't, but she loves them both, and has loved N longer.
Heh, good visuals of the sex scene is always a bonus *evil grin*
I love Russell and Kristen for sticking up for Frances!
"Fuck work and life. I just want to keep on doing this." <--Awesome. Don't you just love that stage in the relationship when things like that can be said?
Oh and I may have missed it, but is Jack American?
"Fuck work and life. I just want to keep on doing this." <--Awesome. Don't you just love that stage in the relationship when things like that can be said?
Fully! I think I miss that bit of being in relationships... :)
Ah. I forget that you guys aren't actually reading into my head *grin* In my head, he's English. I might add that bit in now!
Nell and Isobel, interesting flirting going on! Love Kristen and Nell in the pool. Jack really is a piece of work! Like Kristen is his property! Russell beat Kristen to it, I am sure she wanted to kick Jack's ass.
I wasn't quite sure how to write Jack. I hope he didn't come across too badly! In my head, he does truly love Kristen and is hurt that she's moved on... with another woman, no less. So all that snarky comments about Frances was him kinda lashing out.
I can see that he's hurt by Kristen moving on but it really is his fault. I love how in all the other chapters and this one that Kristen and Frances are together. The easyness between them and the way they tease each other.
How is your knife issues? I walked into a shop and saw knives in a display cabinet and thought of you.
Haha! Aw... that's sweet of you to think of me when you see knives :) I don't actually think anything of it now when they use my knife *gasp* You just made me realise that!
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Like how the conversation went with Benjamin.
Hmm...me thinks things are heating up. Jack needs to take a serious chill pill and let go already. but we know it isn't going to be that easy. ;)
Waiting for the next chapter. :)
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Hope the pace of the story is okay! I worry about people finding it draggy but when I read it over, it's still gripping me, so... fingers crossed that my readers are feeling the same way!
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Don't like that one bit! WORRY time.
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Things are starting to move into another realm I sense Jack is going to be trouble. Thing is Russell is rather volatile, I hope he doesn't get in trouble defending their honor. Poor Kristen is so in love and so happy thinking how great her life is and then this ass ruins her day. I wonder if her brother is truly sorry or just making up stuff to get what he wants.
Frances finally seems to be on the same page and completely devoted which is nice to see. And Isobel and Nell flirting? Good, get them both out of the way!
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Frances and Nell is really modelled after my ex and I; I was writing the next part of the story today and got to a point where I tried to explain F&N's relationship and how it worked... it was really difficult! Because really, the only thing different between F&N and F&K is that K makes F feel all the stuff that N doesn't, but she loves them both, and has loved N longer.
Heh, good visuals of the sex scene is always a bonus *evil grin*
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"Fuck work and life. I just want to keep on doing this." <--Awesome. Don't you just love that stage in the relationship when things like that can be said?
Oh and I may have missed it, but is Jack American?
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Fully! I think I miss that bit of being in relationships... :)
Ah. I forget that you guys aren't actually reading into my head *grin* In my head, he's English. I might add that bit in now!
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Love Kristen and Nell in the pool.
Jack really is a piece of work! Like Kristen is his property!
Russell beat Kristen to it, I am sure she wanted to kick Jack's ass.
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I love how in all the other chapters and this one that Kristen and Frances are together. The easyness between them and the way they tease each other.
How is your knife issues? I walked into a shop and saw knives in a display cabinet and thought of you.
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