Project Revision: Free Fall. Part VIII. PG-13: Obi-Wan, Anakin, OC.

[wyncatastrophe]

Author's note: This (final? semi-final?) version is not much different from the draft posted a couple of days ago, so if you read it then, you are hereby absolved from reading the new one! I've just tweaked some of the wording for clarity, etc. Many thanks, again, to

Comments

Meta! Response part two.

[wyncatastrophe]

- The period scene! I had so much trouble with that. Or not trouble, but … uncertainty? I remember my first period so clearly, and it is such a bad memory. For no obvious reason, it ranks as one of the worst memories of my life, right up there with my grandfather's suicide and my husband admitting he was considering divorce. I don't think it's that upsetting for everybody, and I'm not sure, actually, that Ryn would find it traumatic compared to the other shit going down in her life. But I definitely wanted Anakin to feel uncomfortable in experiencing it vicariously, and to sense some of Ryn's ambiguities about entering womanhood, the sense of "oh shit, I am so not ready for this." So if the scene is kinda gross, and feels awkward in reading, then … I guess I've done my job? LOL for better or worse!

- I'm not sure why you interpret Anakin's Force-vision as evidence of a deep connection. To the extent that they do have some sort of connection, I don't know that it's any more explainable than the way that sometimes you randomly meet a new person and you just "click" with them. But in this particular instance, that scene was not meant to be a sign of a connection between Ryn and Anakin, but a sign of Anakin's connection to the Force - that is, he is worried (and a little angry) about Ryn, and the Force is bringing him visions accordingly. If he had been anxious about something else, he would have had a different vision. Part of my plan for the revision is to thread through more visions for Anakin of various kinds; I think it would make a nice lead-in to ROTS.

- Thank you! I'm glad the convo worked well.

And thanks as well for these thoughtful remarks. It's always excellent when someone takes the time to give well-considered, to-the-point feedback, and you've given me a lot to think about. And as long as my neighbors don't make with the crazy tonight, I might get the next section done! Cheers! :)