Project Revision: Free Fall. Part V. (DRAFT) PG-13: Obi-Wan, Anakin, Yoda, Ensemble.

[wyncatastrophe]

Author's note: OMG, YOU GUYS, I NEED HELP.  Because I have rewritten this section no less than a dozen times, and it still doesn't … quite … work.  It is supposed to cover roughly the same territory of exposition as the original Chapters Two - Four, thus bringing us up to the meeting with Evinne (can't wait!) and the fight scenes in Ziro's palace (

Comments

[wyncatastrophe]

Thanks very much. I appreciate the feedback, and the perspective on Obi-Wan vs. the Temple Healers, that's useful to know.

[wyncatastrophe]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback - and it means a lot to me, coming from you, because I know a) how you felt about the original chapters; and b) how discriminating you are about finding Obi-Wan's "voice" in fanfic - and you know how hard I struggle to find the right tone for him! So thanks.

I also have to thank you for something else … or maybe blame you, I'm not sure. I read the first Harry Potter book as instructed and now I'm … kind of addicted? I had to order the next ones from Amazon and they're not getting here until tomorrow and OH MY GOSH, however will I survive the wait? *bites nails*

How's your 2012?

[wyncatastrophe]

Ha. I am adoring HP. Haven't explored extensively in the fandom yet - I'm afraid! I'm such a newbie. Anyways.

My 2012 is okay. I haven't done much yet - I've written fic and visited family and had two migraines, then written more fic. My latest plan is to … drink a soda and write more fic? LOL. HP should be coming tomorrow, can't wait! :)

[pronker]

He remembered too well what forbidden love had felt like himself.

Okay, so Obi-Wan sounds friendly and empathetic. Ryn sounds lonely and searching for a friend; she finds one in him, perhaps, not the agonized yearning but a friendship of standing.