[POTC fic series] - SAILING IN SAMSARA, C.1 - "Saraswati and the Swan" - rated R
Title: “Saraswati and the Swan”
Series: Sailing in Samsara (1/1 - thus far)
Fandom: Pirates of the Caribbean
Spoilers: Post (my hypothetical) AWE
Pairing: Jack/Elizabeth, Saraswati (OC)
Rating: R
Word Count: 5,550
Summary: The first chapter of a longer work that will address Jack’s backstory and the role of family in his life. Jack and Lizzie set anchor ( Read more... )
I love this story so far; it's actually quite different from your others, but in a good way. I adore your dialogue, esp. your Jack dialogue, as it's absolutely perfect. I also love their relationship in this story, how they've mastered communicating w/o words. So wonderfully sweet :)
Love Sara's character and Lizzie's reaction to her. I can relate to the situation...I had a very difficult time of it with my sisters-in-law for several years *shudders*. Bad, bad memories. If only I'd have known the solution was getting them drunk...
Remembering the snake handlers of some distant bazaar, Elizabeth wished for a flute and a basket. Couldn’t play it, but I could hit her with it.
This made me LOL. It was actually a little embarrassing, as I was at work ;)
As if thanking him, the ship settled in creaks against the waves, sails sighing in the night air, and Jack ran his hands across her spokes in tender lengths.
Beautiful imagery.
“Aye, aye, Pirate Miss, but you’re forgetting one important fact.”
“I know, I know. You’re Captain Jack Sparrow.”
“Are you implying that I’ve become predictable, Miss Swann?”
An arched brow offered his only answer.
Another great glimpse into their relationship. So cute.
“Just keepin’ a weather eye for ye, Captain. Females be the scourge of the sea.”
“I’ll have to convey that to Miss Swann, then.” Jack curled a smile as shades of horror crossed Gibbs’ face while he contemplated the idea.
“No, no. No need there.”
This also made me LOL. Gibbs is scared of Lizzie...I can definitely see that happening :)
I can't wait for the next installment of this! Get to work!
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I'm very glad that you enoyed this - especially with it being so different from my other works. Somehow, they all exist in the same place in my head, but they are manifesting in varied and exciting ways.
"Love Sara's character and Lizzie's reaction to her. I can relate to the situation...I had a very difficult time of it with my sisters-in-law for several years *shudders*. Bad, bad memories. If only I'd have known the solution was getting them drunk..."
-- So glad you're liking Sara's character. Noting like family members to try one's sanity and relationship. Thank God for liquor. ;) (Although I can't help but wonder if this would have worked with my sisters-in-law. Thankfully, we tend to get along, but I think I'd have to take them shopping or something. We're all punch-drunks.)
"This made me LOL. It was actually a little embarrassing, as I was at work ;)"
-- Hee hee. Am totally tickled and now owe you a fruit basket at work or something. I've done this myself a few times, and it always end in either my coworkers thinking I'm insane or catching me in the act. But I don't think I've ever made anyone LOL with my fic before - so exciting, as angst and tension are what come easy for me.
" I also love their relationship in this story, how they've mastered communicating w/o words."
-- Thanks so much! I was inspired a bit by my own relationship. My husband and I have been together for dog's years, despite being relatively young, and there's a rhythm I think one tends to get in long-term relationships that I wanted to capture. They know eachother as they are now probably better than anyone else - the trick is that they remain relatively outside of eachother's past. Gonna have fun with that....
"I can't wait for the next installment of this! Get to work!"
- Yes, ma'am! Am working on it. It's already monstrously long and not half done. It'll be a little while as I have a crazy work week to labor over, not to mention it'll have a couple rewrites. But Plot!Elephant is cracking his trunk, so no fears.....
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I know what you mean. It seems that when writing something plottier w/ more dialogue I really lose my normal writing style. I think that's why I dislike writing it so much :( But you don't seem to have that problem...while this story is different, it's still so good! I still see your 'artsiness' in it, and the same attention to detail and description.
Also, on the topic of sisters-in-law, I actually did get drunk with mine after I'd been with my husband for a few years. Not a good plan. She ended up spilling her guts about why she'd disliked me the whole time.
"Hee hee. Am totally tickled and now owe you a fruit basket at work or something. I've done this myself a few times, and it always end in either my coworkers thinking I'm insane or catching me in the act."
I'll be keeping a weather eye for said fruit basket ;) As soon as I did it, I did the thing where you slouch down in your chair and look around to see if anyone saw you. The misfortune in my case is that I work at the front desk of a building that has glass walls throughout...so I'm quite sure someone must've seen.
Am very much looking forward to something, anything from you very soon!
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