[POTC challenge fic] - "Song" - rated R

[writing_samsara]

Challenge: Write a scene for each of the words below using characters from Pirates of the Caribbean.

1)spine
2)song
3)smoke
4)gold
5)box
6)flee
7)snake
8) memories
9)henna
10)eyes

Two down, eight to go. I wrote this at work, so God knows I may have missed something in proofing. *crosses fingers*

I’ve taken some liberties with the song snippets

Comments

[geekmama]

There are way too many phrases I want to cite in this. You are just too good. The whole first paragraph, for example, is such perfect, perfect Jack. And that's why I'm here, of course.

And then this: "“But not if you get me first, eh me dearest Lady Doom?”"

Their relationship has to be both closer and more turbulent beneath the surface post-Kraken Encounter. It's completely intriguing.

a damp, spongy dreadlock.

Great detail. They would be, too.

I love his quicksilver changes, and her giving him tit for tat, and then his song, undoing her.

She was ribbons in the wind, something lovely and helpless and unfettered.

That is a glorious line.

And then the wonderful intimacy in the cabin.

Surely you are aware of Captain Jack Sparrow’s astounding abilities with his tongue?

LOL! Too too perfect. He's a prodigy in many ways is the Captain, and you've caught so many of them here.

Lovely, and fascinating work.

[writing_samsara]

Thank you, thank you! I had this terrible day at work, but coming here and reading your comments has put a much nicer spin on the day.

I'm so glad that my Jack rang true for you. I have to sheepishly admit that I've only seen the movies twice, so I'm incredibly insecure that my Jack will be "off".

I really appreciate the feedback.