Comments | writers_support: Dialogue

anyotherknight in writers_support

Dialogue

May 17, 2005 16:42

Mods, if I'm barking up the wrong tree, just delete.

I've got a problem regarding dialogue punctuation (which myself and three betas have all missed whilst tearing apart my work). What do you do when you need (or just want) to split two sentences with a dialogue tag, but they aren't different enough to warrant a new paragraph?

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tesseract_5 May 17 2005, 23:04:54 UTC

Is it imperative to have the action of the shurg before the next part of the dialogue? It seems fine the way you've got it. If you want to not break it up so much, you could move the action to the beginning or the end of the woman's thoughts.

*shrug*

anyotherknight May 18 2005, 12:05:55 UTC

It isn't imperative, but I'd really like to keep the shrug. If it looks okay then that's fine. Thank you.

drusillas_rain May 18 2005, 00:09:08 UTC

The example you listed looks fine to me (I've used that format myself).

anyotherknight May 18 2005, 12:05:02 UTC

That's what I thought, but I've been catching some flak for that style.

inkflowers May 22 2005, 21:47:32 UTC

(This post is completely fine, by the way.)

The example you have is correct, in my opinion. Normally the speaker/subject wouldn't be capitalized after the first sentence like that. New sentences always require a capital letter, so just ignore the people telling you off for that. I write like that all the time. XD