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Hey everyone, I'm new to the community and thought I'd post a short story to get started. I helped teach a creative writing course and the kids were struggling with thinking their ideas weren't good enough, so to teach them that ideas aren't inherantly bad, only how you write them, I had them come up with an idea they thought was terrible and said I'd write a story about it.
I'm always looking for feedback, so feel free to comment. On this story I'd like to know if you get bored at any point and if certain parts of dialogue or action just doesn't flow for you. Plese keep those things in mind, but any comments of criticism, opinions, advice are absolutly welcome.
I split the story into two parts for post length so here are links to both.
The Gifted Part 1
The Gifted Part 2
I'm always looking for feedback, so feel free to comment. On this story I'd like to know if you get bored at any point and if certain parts of dialogue or action just doesn't flow for you. Plese keep those things in mind, but any comments of criticism, opinions, advice are absolutly welcome.
I split the story into two parts for post length so here are links to both.
The Gifted Part 1
The Gifted Part 2