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Survivor Island Response

Aug 25, 2006 23:51

This is my entry for the final write_away survivor island challenge. If you like my story, respond. You can respond to more than one story, so if you do like it even a little you don't have to wait to see the others, because you'll still be able to vote for them, too ( Read more... )

type: prose, feature: survivor island, user: smeddley

Comments 8

blue_thundering August 26 2006, 06:01:57 UTC

Haha! Oh man; I just re-watched The Purple Rose of Cairo two days ago, so this is deliciously well-timed. And considering Viola's backstory to date, this plot twist also seems very much in keeping with her spectrum of possible storylines. Good luck with the other votes!

smeddley August 26 2006, 16:10:21 UTC

I've not seen that movie - I'm assuming, since you were re-watching it, that it was good? I might have to see if our library has that.

And thank you!

As I am a huge huge huge (oh my god squeal) Bruce Campell fan, I would rather have Autolycus appear out of thin air, but it seems just a smidgen more likely a god could do that... *le sigh* 'Socay, Ares was pretty hot, too.

*nudge* auraesque August 26 2006, 13:09:36 UTC

Paste in the words and definitions you used at the end. :)

Re: *nudge* smeddley August 26 2006, 16:11:45 UTC

Sorry! All better now. I blame it on the Mac... I can't get the handle of that thing!

royanrannedos August 26 2006, 18:23:47 UTC

I guess the rains down in Africa? :?)

Good story

smeddley August 26 2006, 18:48:17 UTC

Thank you for liking it, and oh, THANK YOU SO MUCH for putting that song in my head... But, anyone who can work Kilimanjaro into a song is, you have to admit, pretty awesome. Ironically, I've actually been alternating between that and "Land Down Under" (thanks, ljdq for the better part of the week.

calliopeiamuse August 27 2006, 08:06:41 UTC

Hi! I haven't been following the "Survivor Island" stuff, so I'm not exactly sure what I'm supposed to be critiquing your story for. However, I did notice a couple of mistakes that good ol' spellcheck doesn't catch.

“What the hell…” she chocked out.
Obviously you meant choked out.

Her eyes dipped lover and she noticed he was only wearing a loose-fitting pair of linen-like pants.
I think you meant lower, not lover, lol. Although that came later.

Yeah. That was it. I was gonna ask about the spartling, but you took care of that, lol. Good job!

smeddley August 28 2006, 04:42:49 UTC

*sigh* Too bad 'spellcheck' isn't 'proper work check.' Someone had a really cool icon about that...

Aw, you've missed a lot of fun! But it's nice to have you back! Thanks!