Comments | wonder_1859: Fic: These Scars We Wear

wonder_1859

Fic: These Scars We Wear - 16/?

Nov 01, 2012 20:52

Obligatory disclaimer: Not mine and never will be. All credit goes to GRRM. I’m just playing with his toys while he’s not looking. I promise to return them in as good a shape as I found them.
Summary: Sandor Clegane discovers that death does not always mark the end of a life. Sometimes it's only the beginning. Spoilers up to and including A Feast ( Read more... )

sandor cleagne, sansa stark, au, fanfic, asoiaf

Comments 11

caroh99 November 2 2012, 03:33:26 UTC

ahhh, what can i say that i haven't told you before? this story keeps getting better and better. it is nice to see how you manage to weave the bigger plot with small little details like them comforting each other at night,and OMG that bit with sandor rubbing sansa so the ache from her moonblood could go away was priceless! just priceless and bloody perfect!! :D

wonder_1859 November 4 2012, 19:43:51 UTC

Thank you! :)

westeroswolf November 2 2012, 13:33:36 UTC

The fluff before the rough, excellent! Hope it's not too rough though!!!
I love a bit of snuggling, so I'm one happy reader. I think you have captured Sandor's sense of humour really well with his quips.
The casual intimacy here and them enjoying each others company makes their relationship so much more real and captivating for me. I'm totally obsessed!

wonder_1859 November 4 2012, 19:44:55 UTC

"I think you have captured Sandor's sense of humour really well with his quips."

Oh, good! I was hoping I could find just the right level of snarkiness for him.

the_moonmoth November 3 2012, 12:31:13 UTC

Now he can get out of his own way and simply watch.

Love that sentence, and the insight that comes with it.

She reminds him of a filly standing there, all long slender legs and filled with innate grace.

Beautiful description.

"The first one's free. Might be I'll want something in return next time. Not a bloody punch to the nose either."

I laughed at that. I know he's being facetious, but it's still very in character that he wouldn't give these tender kindnesses for free ;)

Another gorgeous chapter. I loved the little glimpses of their developing relationship, both emotional and physical. And the note of danger at the end has me even more eager for the next chapter than usual!

One note of concrit (I hope you don't mind a little criticism), and this might just be a personal thing on my part, but I find that he calls her "bird" and not "little bird" quite jarring. I don't know if you have your own reasons for that, though...

wonder_1859 November 4 2012, 19:52:26 UTC

"One note of concrit (I hope you don't mind a little criticism), and this might just be a personal thing on my part, but I find that he calls her "bird" and not "little bird" quite jarring. I don't know if you have your own reasons for that, though..."

No, I don't mind a bit!

I don't really know that I have reasons for using "bird' instead of "little bird" sometimes. It wasn't a conscious choice. I just hear Sandor in my head and transcribe his words. I don't know how else to explain it other than it must be a sort of Sandor-ish shorthand the muse has come up with; that he'll use the full nickname and occasionally bump it down to "bird."

I'm sorry you find it jarring. I'll give it more thought in the editing yet to come, as you may not be the only one finding it so. I'm glad you said something. :)

swiftsnowmane November 13 2012, 15:17:34 UTC

I actually really like him calling her 'bird'. :) Its like how people used to call him 'dog'....only this one is a much more affectionate nickname. :)

onborrowedwings November 4 2012, 06:20:34 UTC

Ah you make me nervous with that comment about it being the fluff before the storm! I know every great story needs its ups and downs thoug and am just hoping that our intrepid pair will get through whatever is to come relatively unscathed.

A lovely chapter filled with insights about the way that a relationship can change and the way that it can change you. All of the snuggling made me very happy :) Loved Sansa's dreams of a small cottage that they could make their own, as well as Sandor's understanding that taking her maidenhead is no small thing, and his determination to honour her as he believes that she deserves.

Another wonderful chapter.

wonder_1859 November 4 2012, 19:55:30 UTC

Thank you! :)

I mean to give your latest chapter a read tonight. If I can ditch the muse and stay off tumblr long enough, that is. My brain is all over the place today. Temporary ADD. *rolling eyes*

dealbreaker19 November 8 2012, 06:04:45 UTC

This is one of my current favorite fics. The plot moves along at a good clip, without them falling into bed together immediately (although I do enjoy those kind of fics as well sometimes...all right I enjoy those fics all the time ;)) and seems realistic as if it could really happen *crosses fingers and prays to both the old and new gods* in canon ( ... )