not free flowing shit poetry

[wolfieris]

Free flowing poems laugh and see

Comments

[rhaniha]

I like your poem, but... this line "consumes a fat, white, folly rat" seems a little forced. So does the last stanza. It doesn't seem to match with the first; I really like the first stanza and the first two lines of the second, best of all. Nice job, but I would consider reworking some of it. :-)

[wolfieris]

i completely agree actually, but i was frustrated so the reworking didn't take place before i posted it.

thx for commenting..it's been a while

[rhaniha]

Your welcome. I'm not online much anymore. :-p I hope you're doing well.

[wolfieris]

no, you aren't. i'm quite fine...have you written anything more? and did you get your story published yet?

[rhaniha]

Which one? I'm quite sure I'm getting one ("For I Have Sinned") published in the Bucks County Writer. The editor loved it. LOVED it. :-) So there's a good chance.

[wolfieris]

not that one...although i did like that one...the one i'm thinking was a trilogy. i think you gave it to me last summer? i never got that third pt. (grr)

[rhaniha]

Oh, that. That one has been put aside for more marketable endeavors. I.e., short stories.

[wolfieris]

oh. poo. i loved the other two tho (not that i didn't love your short stories, they rocked)...you are planning on getting it finished tho, right? *is hopeful*

[rhaniha]

I will finish it, but right now, I'm working on a murder-most-foul novel, which I really believe is my best work so far. I have so much faith in this, in fact, that I'm going to pay someone at the Writer's Room in Doylestown to edit and critique it for me so I can get it ready for publication. It's almost finished and I'm on page 61. I just stayed up until 2:00 AM writing it. This IS the best I've ever done. :-)