[FIC] Ever After (Chapter 4/11)

[ocelotkitty]

Title: Ever After
Main Pairing: Jeff/Greg, with background Chip/Wayne and Colin/Ryan
Rating: R for language
Total Word Count: 17,890
Chapter Word Count: 1,627
Summary: Jeff’s a directionally challenged actor who can’t seem to catch a break. Chip promises that Jeff’s new GPS will be the solution to all of his problems, but why does it seem to cause

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[ocelotkitty]

Oh, G-d, I really milked that Mexican hat dance thing dry, didn't I? *hides face*

I love how even though Wayne was once Jeff's significant other, they can still have this friendly, casual relationship. It's like they both knew they weren't meant to be as lovers, so they can get past it and still enjoy each other's company. Well, until Jeff finds out about Wayne and Chip! But even that comes off more as a "my two closest friends have paired off and are leaving me behind, and they couldn't even bother to tell me" kind of hurt than jealousy

Excellent, excellent, excellent. I'm SO glad that came through -- I was trying really hard to have their dating relationship be the awkward thing and then their friendship be the thing they can relax into. And yeah, Jeff's reaction was definitely more about his own aloneness than the fact that Wayne and Chip had got together.

Is it wrong that I can totally see Brad doing this after the Colin and Brad tour ends?

Nope! *giggles*

The midnight conversation with Greg is completely made of awesome. It's so surreal that you're left wondering if Jeff is actually dreaming this whole thing. It has a very spacy, dreamlike quality to it.

Awww, your comments are made of awesome :-) *hugs you*

[sungreen70]

Oh, G-d, I really milked that Mexican hat dance thing dry, didn't I? *hides face*

Oh, no, not at all. It's a cool quirky detail and it makes sense to have it keep popping up :)

Although the next time you write a fic I think you should include a hearing clock. I'm just saying.