vail-kagami: Smoke (Jack/Ten, Master/Ten) [R]

[vail_kagami]

Title: Smoke
Author: vail_kagami 
Beta: nightrider101 
Challenge: Amnesia
Rating: R
Spoilers: None
Warnings: Graphic violence
Summary: He doesn't know who he was or where he came from, nor does he really want to find out.

Comments

[nightrider101]

“We have a deal then?” He’s almost purring.

“Yes.” The answer is nearly inaudible, breathed at the story ground. You feel vague relief when you hear it and have not enough strength left to remember why you shouldn’t.

“Yes. You’ve won. Just let him go. Leave him alone and I’ll…”

Ouch. Each flashback was felt like a knife twisting in my poor heart. The impression this story left is both heartbreaking and very creepy.

I couldn't imagine every having to through something so terrible. I can't blame Jack for wanting to forget. Hopefully in this new life he'll find peace.

I can't imagine what life must be like for the Doctor now. *sniff*

You're not afraid to tackle stories that would make me run screaming in the other direction. Not only do you write them, but you handle it with a certain skill and ability that's all your own.

As always, thank you for sharing.

[vail_kagami]

As always, thank you for commenting.
And for betaing, naturally. Whatever would I do without you?

[nightrider101]

Whatever would I do without you?

Hm...post unbetaed fic? :P

I wouldn't worry about it too much. Like you could get rid of me now. :D

[blackletter]

So creepy and sad. I love it!

The POV and tense shift between sections distinguishing past events from present was very effective. Like two different stories, two different lives.

[vail_kagami]

Thank you. I had some rewriting to do before it all was in a shape I aproved of.

[jade_dragoness]

*swallows* Well, there is my heart stomped flat on the ground. *whimpers*

As much as I hurt for the Doctor, I think I hurt more for Jack. Because he doesn't remember. And if he ever does? *winces* Oh my poor squashed heart.

[vail_kagami]

I suppose if he ever remembers (and he will, eventually) he won't be particularly happy. Neither with the Master nor the Doctor nor himself.
Thanks for commenting.

[petit_fox]

Ahhh ;___;

You evil master of pure evilness! That broke my heart and I don't want to think longer about that deal the Doc had to accept to get Jack free. Jealous Master... Now the Doc is bound to him. ;__;

Yeah, it was brilliant though. No other than you is able to write such dark intensive stories. Keep up your writing :)

[vail_kagami]

Thanks, I will!

[eryaforsthye]

I love you.

I adore all your stories, naturally, but this one has earned a special place in my heart.

This story is incredible.

It was sparse and efficient and every single sentence gave added meaning to the fic as a whole.

This was so beautifully crafted - delicate, painful, careful; each section a well-aimed dagger right into the heart. Reading this was not unlike admiring intricate clockwork; perfectly made, everything perfectly fitting.

This is one of the best fics I have ever read - above even your usual amazing fare!

Definitely one for me to re-visit and admire most frequently in the future. :D

*worships*

*mems under 'Brilliance'

[vail_kagami]

I'm happy you liked it so much! Nice reading from you again.