Fanfic (Yu-Gi-Oh!): ISSUES
Happy Birthday, Anna!!
First of: I apologize that this is an unfinished work in progress. I knew it was going to be an epic but still didn't get it done in time. >///<;; I had fun writing it though, and I WILL finish it, however long it's going to get ( Read more... )
First of: I apologize that this is an unfinished work in progress. I knew it was going to be an epic but still didn't get it done in time. >///<;; I had fun writing it though, and I WILL finish it, however long it's going to get ( Read more... )
Ain't it the truth. XD And no one does daddy issues better than the Kaiba brothers... except maybe Zuko, lol.
Anyway, the "cut" title came to me spontaneously, but by now is kinda like the fic's sub title in my head. Gozaburo Kaiba was a strong influence on both boys, as a good or bad father figure is debatable, and they both strive for recognition, from the world, their father, and themselves. In terms of parents, "recognition" and "love" are very closely intertwined. Taking into account the fact that Seto lost his own parents early on he focused to much stronger on himself, while at the same time Gozaburo's influence filled that gap whether he wanted it to or not. Mokuba is another thing altogether, because Seto is both brother and parent to him. Hence his need for love from him.
regarding that it includes Mokuba going through puberty - I enjoyed that scene so much.
So did I. XD I enjoyed showing both brothers more negative than positive and still tried to make it possible to relate to them. They hurt each other because they care. An dammit, BEWD tattoo.
I especially love how you take your time and introduce the three brothers, all with their own personal problems
It's partly due to the fact that I have never written them before and need to discover them for myself as well, which I do while wirting them, strangely enough. The fact that it's an AU of sorts that also makes them older makes this all the more imperative.
and I really love Noah's waking up and rehabilitation process.
I actually looked that up to make sure it works somewhat realistically. Oftentiems in movies, people just wake up from a coma and are a-okay from one day to the other. Fact is that they wake up slowly and gradually, and Noah also has the added factor of having spent *years* asleep. I believe one year is nothing short of miraculous as far as recoveries go, but we'll have to let that slide... ^^;;
Your character interpretation is indeed perfect - he is his father's son and his attitude is so wonderfully spoiled. <3
You have NO idea how glad I am to hear this. Like I said, I never did give Noah too much thought before, but he is *tremendous* fun to write! He's a spoiled brat with the means to be a fucking pain in the ass (lol literally lol), and he always thinks he's right.
But what comes second and is really a touchy subject is Seto - I am so awfully pettish when it comes to him. ;___;
But please ignore that, I don't want to scare you, I just wanted to illustrate that it means a lot to me that I have nothing to object here. <3
Seto has gotten less characterization than the other two so far, more describtions. Please please PLEASE tell me when I get him wrong. I want him to be way-too-grown-up, trying to do everything right and at the same time not doing what others tell him because they are *wrong*. He's a genius and knows it and thinks he needs to do everything alone. He doesn't realize that his genius doesn't extend to all parts of his life, like social interaction with his brother. I want him to be quite consumed by his work because if he *were* paying more attention to Mokuba, Noah coudln't fill that brother role for him. ^^;; But he does love Mokuba, and he's terribly afraid to do wrong by him (which is part of the problem).
>///<;; Also, he needs a spanking.
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