Pairing: Mercutio/Romeo (unrequited)
Rating: R
Length: 9475 words :o
Warnings: character death (do I have to say angst?)
Summary: Mercutio's been in love with his best friend for a long time, whether he admits it or not, but some stars cannot be defied, and he will have to confront himself and his fate. The events of the play from Mercutio's
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Interesting choice to have Mercutio aware of Romeo's eye on Juliet. That's one point where I would have loved some narrative elaboration, since it changes the dynamic of the scene with the nurse and the scene with the duel considerably.
I have to say, I really like Maia. Her behavior isn't quite right for a servant/master relationship, but she's such a refreshingly down-to-earth person that it doesn't matter much. She's exactly the kind of friend Mercutio needs in his life. Too bad that Romeo and Benvolio aren't up to it.
Finally, I loved the final paragraph, the way Mercutio dies thinking he's done something right and good. At that moment, he has -- he really has saved Romeo, and it's Romeo's own fault that he throws that chance way.
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What a great relationship they have. She's so good for him. I hope he's good for her as well. His death probably broke her heart.
Romeo is a terrific wuss. He's also an idiot -- most of the other characters in the play, including Juliet, can think circles around him. I tend to write him as one of those guys who's good-looking but dim, is partially aware of it, and relies on his good looks and charm to get him through life. Considerably easier for a wealthy Renaissance teenager than for anyone today!
*dashes off to plunder your fic archives*
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