Comments | wiggerwoman: Howl (Lew/Sid, R)

wiggerwoman

Howl (Lew/Sid, R)

Jun 22, 2011 23:42

Pairing: Lew/Sid (by "Lew" I am referring to Chuckler ( Read more... )

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Comments 4

teaspoonery June 23 2011, 08:28:44 UTC

(I think you might want to put this under a cut)

wiggerwoman June 23 2011, 19:46:36 UTC

Oh. I thought I did. I'll go work on that.

rei17 June 23 2011, 12:42:46 UTC

This pairing really works great. ;) And it's not even difficult to imagine Chuckler being kind of obsessed with Sid. Sid is such an adorable pretty southern boy and you can't help but wonder how he ended up here with all these guys in the middle of the jungle.
As constructive criticism I can only say that it felt a bit rushed to me and I wish you would've taken more time create the mood or provide a little bit inside of the characters, but maybe that's just me. ^^

wiggerwoman June 23 2011, 19:45:42 UTC

Thanks so much!
I also thought it was a bit rushed after I read it a few times, and maybe in my next story I'll try to talk more about the characters' thoughts.