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[wicked_wiccan]

Well... I finished the prologue for my book. I still cant think of a title for it. Imma post the prologue now so you may all laugh at my horrible writing. Any constructive critism is greatly appreciated. I want to know if this story sounds like somehing people would actually read and enjoy. So without further adue is the prologue for the novel

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[magik3x3]

I'm subbin' right now, so I didn't get to read all of it. I olny got as far as that one part, A look of discomfort ceased the man’s face as his eyes met with the demon’s piercing gaze. Confidently the man held his sword up, and taking a deep breath. “What do you want, demon?” the valiant soldier said. “The star” the demon answered back. and I like the hell out it so far. A little re-editing and it would be ready to be published. I'll give you suggestions once I'm finished, but, so far so good. I'll finish it when I get home or have more time. Now, I have to go and get the little third graders from PE class. Later!

Not bad at all

[magik3x3]

Okay, I finished it. I liked it. I saw very few things that could be changed. If you would like I could go over it when I get home and edit it and send you the "Magikally Edited" version. I wouldn't change much, just some minor grammatical errors. I love your word choice and your use of much detail and description. I can actually see what I'm reading and I just love that because it goes from being a writing story to an imagined movie. I mean I could practically draw the characters you describe and that's awesome.

I look foreward to reading more. Aterlay!

about yo website

[magik3x3]

That movie that you did for the intro, I remember you working on that a long time ago at Chris's crib, back when Josh used to live there. How could I get my hands on the program used to make that???

[wicked_wiccan]

any help on my writing is extremely helpful. It took me like a month to get that done and that is just the prologue that is set in the past. Some words are spelled wrong on purpose. i spell like the british because i am british but there may be alot of other errors i missed. I used a thesaurus for my word choice because i keep thinking i use the same words too many times. I was really worried about detail. i have trouble explaing in detail so people can see in their mind what i want them to. Feel free to edit it oh and i am all trying to incorporate my m8s and people in the book. If you wouldnt mind i would also like to pt you in it. If not then thats cool. Peopel have actually asked me not to. But he is going to illustrate my story for me.... yay. My intro program is swish. i dunno which verson but i got a key generator for it so it is free for me. Ill try to get it together and send it to you. i just need an email address

[relientk1386]

I didn't know you were such a good writer...I'm not that great with creative writing, though I haven't really tried, but I'm good at writing essays and stuff for class. When your book gets published, can I have an autographed copy? ;)

hmm.

[magik3x3]

my email addy is:
mizu3x3@yahoo

I'll just edit it and email it to you after I get your email address after you email me about that program.

About illustrating it for you, I could do that fa sho'. Eventhough Josh is the artistic'est (I just made that up) of the bunch. I can draw as well, but not as well as Josh. Well, our styles are just different.

[wicked_wiccan]

never really thought about getting it published. Because personally i dont think i can write. Either you are just being nice or i was actually wrong. But if i ever do publish it then sure.