February 15 Drabble Fest

Feb 15, 2010 11:47

February brings us back to twice-monthly drabble fests, and hope you will enjoy this one. This installment consists primarily of lines from twentieth century poetry with a few song lyrics thrown in for good measure. As always, write as much as you can and leave as much feedback as you can!

The Rules:1) Prompts are not exclusive. There is no ( Read more... )

canon: ds9, canon: aos, character: joanna, challenge: drabblefest, character: canon unnamed, character: irina, character: madeline, character: gaila, creative: fic, character: mandana, canon: tos, character: number one, character: amanda, character: female changeling, character: chapel

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They fuck you up your mum and dad... (Joanna McCoy) tinocka February 15 2010, 20:39:21 UTC
They fuck you up your mum and dad
They don't mean to but they do
They give you all the faults they had
And add some extra just for you. “You´re not going home?” her roommate asks and Joanna shakes her head wordlessly ( ... )

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Re: They fuck you up your mum and dad... (Joanna McCoy) captaincadet February 15 2010, 20:51:06 UTC
:( poor joanna. she inherited space fear? that is the worrrrst.

i am glad she managed to inherit some of that determination as well, though.

wonderful work and interesting characterization. for some reason i really like that this all occurs in her room. i like to think that outside of there no one has any idea she's afraid.

:)

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Re: They fuck you up your mum and dad... (Joanna McCoy) tinocka February 15 2010, 21:49:43 UTC
THank you :)

I´m certain she inherited many good traits from both her parents :) I, too, think that no one knows :)

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Re: They fuck you up your mum and dad... (Joanna McCoy) darstellen February 16 2010, 17:04:08 UTC
I'm amazed by how much depth you were able to give the prompt. Joanna's story, her insecurities, were well portrayed, and her determination motivating.

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It could have happened. It had to happen. (Kelvin Tactical Officer) captaincadet February 15 2010, 20:44:02 UTC
It could have happened.
It had to happen.
It happened earlier. Later.
Nearer. Farther off.
It happened, but not to you. The most important thing Blair Lewis had learned from the academy was not tactical maneuvers, not astrophysics, not how to fight with her bare hands. The most important thing she learned was how to die. She learned how to go without giving away Starfleet secrets. She learned how to prolong your life as long as you could, even in the direst of circumstances, and how to make split second decisions that may lead to your own death, but would save countless others. She learned it well, kept it at the forefront so she would never be surprised when faced with death ( ... )

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Re: It could have happened. It had to happen. (Kelvin Tactical Officer) tinocka February 15 2010, 20:52:18 UTC
This is wonderfully written. It makes me shiver. It feels so real. I love it.

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Re: It could have happened. It had to happen. (Kelvin Tactical Officer) captaincadet February 16 2010, 00:31:36 UTC
thank you so much! :) i'm glad it came across well.

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Re: It could have happened. It had to happen. (Kelvin Tactical Officer) igrockspock February 16 2010, 00:31:29 UTC
This is beautiful!

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for some girls... (Gaila; mentions of her darker past...) tinocka February 15 2010, 21:47:17 UTC
for some girls, our bodies are not immortal so much as
expendableHer mind belongs to her, whoever owns her body. That has always been Gaila´s philosophy ( ... )

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Re: for some girls... (Gaila; mentions of her darker past...) jdphoenix February 15 2010, 21:56:41 UTC
I adore this! It says so much about who Gaila is in so few words. Excellent job!

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Re: for some girls... (Gaila; mentions of her darker past...) tinocka February 16 2010, 11:15:10 UTC
THank you! .)

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Re: for some girls... (Gaila; mentions of her darker past...) igrockspock February 16 2010, 00:30:56 UTC
That last line is absolutely perfect!

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When I had no mother... (Number One) igrockspock February 16 2010, 00:30:28 UTC
When I had no father I made
Care my father. When I had
No mother I embraced order.One arrives at the Academy with a single black duffel bag. She is the first in the dorm check-in line, and she watches from her sixth floor window as the other cadets emerge from cars, surrounded by parents and laden with overflowing cardboard boxes. She had finished unpacking more than an hour ago. The bottom most drawer of her bureau is half-full of civilian clothing; the top one filled with bras and underwear made from plain white cotton. Three uniforms hang in her closet, and under the bed are precisely three pairs of shoes: regulation boots, simple black pumps, and new white sneakers for running. They had cost more than half the credits in her meager account, but she likes to have the best. On the wall, she hangs a copy of her class schedule and a nav chart of this quadrant, both done in her immaculate hand ( ... )

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Re: When I had no mother... (Number One) captaincadet February 16 2010, 00:34:17 UTC
i like how you've contained so much time in such a short space without sacrificing characterization. great work!

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Re: When I had no mother... (Number One) igrockspock February 16 2010, 02:52:52 UTC
Thank you so much!

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Re: When I had no mother... (Number One) taraljc February 16 2010, 01:11:30 UTC
"Here," she says, not without satisfaction.

I love thais. It's perfect.

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Cousin Universe... 1/2 (Number One) taraljc February 16 2010, 01:24:37 UTC
Warning: This takes place in the mirror universe.

19. Perhaps I am somewhere patient, somehow kind, perhaps in the nook of a cousin universe I've never defiled or betrayed anyoneThey were lying in his bed, the sweat cooling on their bodies, when he asked her ( ... )

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Cousin Universe... 2/2 (Number One) taraljc February 16 2010, 01:25:21 UTC
"She doesn't want me to give more than I already do. She wants me for what I am. No one's ever wanted me for just... what I am." She shrugged. "Even you want me to be something else, something different. You want something from me that I don't know how to give. Every second we're together, it... tries to pull me apart. It tries to crawl inside me and change me into someone I don't think I can be. And what scares me is that I want it. I keep coming back. And when I'm with her, I hate myself a little less for being with you ( ... )

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Re: Cousin Universe... 2/2 (Number One) igrockspock February 16 2010, 02:50:25 UTC
This makes me shiver it's so good. You really understand mirror!Pike.

Also, I was so excited to see this when I came back from the gym. When I wrote the prompt, I was thinking, "I hope someone writes mirror verse fic for this." And then I thoguht, "I hope it's about Number One, and I hope it's by taraljc

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Re: Cousin Universe... 2/2 (Number One) taraljc February 16 2010, 03:39:19 UTC
I was telling boo, Mirror!Pike/Number One is fascinating to write, because it's just so complicated. And scary. And Pike is seductive, but still terrifying to me. And I love writing Mirror!Number One because as damaged as she is, she still refuses to bend, or break.

eta: also *blush* Thank you!

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