SG-1 Fic: The Advantages of Mind Reading (R) (1/2)

[what_works]

Fandom: Stargate: SG-1
Title: The Advantages of Mind Reading (1/2)
Author: Em
Rating: R for language and implied sex
Word Count: ~12,800 (in 2 parts)
Pairing: Jack/Daniel
Prompt: from doctorv for the Jack/Daniel Ficathon V: cyberpunk, humor, cartoons, pre-Season 9, no fluffy-wuffy
013. Tension ( Little Damn Table)
Summary: An off-world mission just isn't

Comments

[green_grrl]

Eeeee! Telepathy! (And creepy Dawes!)

Just stopping to say that this is a line that's been waiting years to be written:

"Technically their big space guns don't honk."

Hee!

[theemdash]

Eeeee! Telepathy! (And creepy Dawes!)

I'm a big fan of telepathy!fic so I figured I should write my own. I actually didn't do everything I wanted to do with telepathy, so maybe there will be another one in the offing. ;)

Just stopping to say that this is a line that's been waiting years to be written:
"Technically their big space guns don't honk."

Heh heh heh. . . . Thank you. I kind of love that line a lot.

[green_grrl]

Another one? I highly approve! :-D

[audrich]

HEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!

I loved this - thank you so much for the heads up!

There were so many great moments, I had a hard job picing them out!

The 'hot' opening caught my attention at once :)

I LOL'd at this:
Every time SG-1 got sucked in on a "cultural exchange" everything went to hell.

"Not every time," Daniel muttered next to him.

"Specific." Jack clicked his P-90 over to single-shot and took careful aim at the guy manning the energy cannon that was making everything explode. The man's head snapped back and he dropped. "Can you raise them?"

Loved that fire-fight speak, very military.

the Daniel in his head who leaned closer to kiss him. "Now's so not the time for that."
LOL :D

"Shit. Daniel." Blood dripped down Daniel's leg, a huge tear along the calf
MEEEEP!!

The man stepped into Jack's space, examining his face closely, sending a flare through Jack's spine.
Nice!

I like the way you found out more how they got into this position *coughs* through dialogue and exposition as opposed to narrative.

"Hammond is going to

[theemdash]

The 'hot' opening caught my attention at once :)

I love writing 'hot' scenes. And starting with that felt right on so many levels. Glad you enjoyed it!

I like the way you found out more how they got into this position *coughs* through dialogue and exposition as opposed to narrative.

I tried to spool everything out slowly but not too slowly. I feel like there was a little bit of preaching in some points, but mostly there was a demonstration (Jack realizing he's hearing Daniel's thoughts) followed by an explanation. So I think that works.

Well, it worked for you, at least! ;)

This Dawes guy is fleshing out so well...

Glad you think that! Dawes is based off an original character KL and I are using in an original novel. (I say "based" because this is a totally different time period and Dawes here is kind of the aftermath of the events in the novel.) Dawes and Gerard are two of my favorite characters, so it really pleases me that people enjoyed both of them.

Thanks for the detailed review! I love it when people quote at me.

[tejas]

Btw, I am *so* stoked you posted your new story. I've got this one open and ready to read before diving into the new one, but I've got to set aside the time to do it all at once. :-) I know better than to even *start* this one before having the hours set aside because it will wipe out every other thing I need to do until I finish them both. :-)

[theemdash]

This is the loveliest "pre" comment I've received. I hope both lived up to the hype. ;)

[tejas]

You will. I'm sure. :-) Life has intervened. My dad's in the hospital and may be moving to at least a partial-care facility - I still have to call my mother and find out what the doctors decided to do. He's in his 80s and having some cognitive issues that *MAY* be reactions to his various meds. *sigh* Not completely unexpected, but never easy. Still, in the back of my mind, I've got this lovely escape planned in the form of a nice long fic by a writer I always look forward to. ;-)

[theemdash]

♥ Well, I'll be standing by for your reaction when you get your escape. (*hugs* on the real-life stuff.)