New drabble: Inspiration
Wrote this last night and couldn't decide whether I hated it or was only lukewarm about it.
aibhinn and
larielromeniel were both very kind and said they liked it. Today, I'm still sitting on the fence, so I'm putting it up here for now to see whether my flist will tell me, kindly or otherwise, that this is one that should have been smothered at birth ;)
Might take it down later, but here it is for now (no spoilers beyond Doomsday):
Inspiration
His skin’s tingling. Spiders are crawling around his head.
There’s the reason. Watching them, the impossibly young man with untidy hair and long brown coat, a look in his ancient eyes the Doctor knows too well.
“I lost her.” His next self’s voice is quiet, his gaze fixed on Rose, oblivious mere yards away.
The gut-punch hurts. “Dead?”
“Parallel universe.”
As good as dead. Oh, Rose. “You shouldn’t be here.”
“You’ll forget. Had to say goodbye.”
His hand rests on brown cloth. “Say it properly. You’ll find a way.”
A wild grin appears. “Course I will. I’m brilliant, I am.”
END
aibhinn and
larielromeniel were both very kind and said they liked it. Today, I'm still sitting on the fence, so I'm putting it up here for now to see whether my flist will tell me, kindly or otherwise, that this is one that should have been smothered at birth ;)
Might take it down later, but here it is for now (no spoilers beyond Doomsday):
Inspiration
His skin’s tingling. Spiders are crawling around his head.
There’s the reason. Watching them, the impossibly young man with untidy hair and long brown coat, a look in his ancient eyes the Doctor knows too well.
“I lost her.” His next self’s voice is quiet, his gaze fixed on Rose, oblivious mere yards away.
The gut-punch hurts. “Dead?”
“Parallel universe.”
As good as dead. Oh, Rose. “You shouldn’t be here.”
“You’ll forget. Had to say goodbye.”
His hand rests on brown cloth. “Say it properly. You’ll find a way.”
A wild grin appears. “Course I will. I’m brilliant, I am.”
END