oh you're gonna love this
Oy…have tons of things been going on with me. I finally reached my 100lb goal and have surpassed it. I have 41lbs left to go and I have started a new round of the P90 but now I have moved on to the Master’s Series hoping it will jump-start my metabolism and drop this last bit I need to get rid of.
My crazy sister has asked my son Justin to “Like” her e-book (that she published herself because no one else would) called “Writers on the Storm” The irony of her request is that she absolutely stole Justin’s story about when he was in trouble a few years back and turned him into a 14 year old girl for this book. Then she added every cliché possible and used absolutely no imagination whatsoever! After he told me what she wanted I read the sample…you can too if you can stomach it.
Here is a brief overview:
Until now, the most important thing in 14-year-old Cornelia Drake’s life was maintaining her rightful place just outside the most popular clique at Storm River High School. But when she is sentenced to community service for writing a racial slur against a Muslim teacher, Mrs. Hakim, Cornelia’s world comes crashing down. She is forced to join Mrs. Hakim’s writing club, Writers on the Storm, where Cornelia is introduced to a group of extraordinary people from all walks of life, including Admeta Vasquez, a classmate who makes no bones about despising Cornelia. When the two rivals become unlikely friends, they are thrown a curve ball when they discover that Mrs. Hakim has breast cancer and may not make it. Cornelia is forced to choose between her precious clique and her new found friends. She can take the easy road or stand and fight alongside the teacher she once despised.
Read the whole sample of shit here http://www.smashwords.com/books/view/45074
Cornelia (cause ya know all the hip young girls want to have the name Cornelia) wears pink Chanel suits and Versace shoes (cause all the hip young girls want to wear old lady pink chanel suits instead of Michael Kors or Vera Wang). Since she wanted to give this a California feel Cornelia lives in “Price Valley”(sic Hill) near the corner of Glenway and Gilsey close to Beech (the road we lived on when my sister was born). Cornelia’s Boyfriend is a hippy-like young man named Chad not be confused with my son’s hippy-like best friend Chad and her rival is a peppy little cheerleader named McKenzie, Kenzie for short not to be confused with my son’s girlfriend Mckenzie, Kenzie for short. The judge calls her a "stuck-up, spoiled rotten little hooligan" ...yes hooligan about 15 times between page 9 and 12. She uses "spanglish" as dialog in one place and then explains what spanglish is...like her readers are complete idiots. the best part however when she uses the dialog "wow, Cornelia, harsh much?". What is this Clueless?
You get the idea. It’s crap.
The worst part is she thinks it is good. You can not talk down to your readers. If your target audience is the young adult reader you can talk to them as if they are 5. Young adults are just that...they understand what spanglish is and you can use harsher words than holligan...really who uses the word hooligan? At least "punk" would have brought her into the 90's but this is definately NOT modern tween fiction.
It is incredibly humorous for me to read however since I know all of these people and how she stole their identities for this book. Writers usually draw on their experience but don’t blatantly steal other people’s lives and call it a work of fiction…. At least not credible authors. Don’t get me wrong…Sis has written some well thought out articles and been published in several magazines and newspapers…I just think she should stick to that cause this piece of crap…it ain’t gonna sell to nooooooooo body.
Although my friend Stevie wants to know if she called my sister and told her she was a friend of mine could she get a discount or even get an autographed copy….I love my friends!
My crazy sister has asked my son Justin to “Like” her e-book (that she published herself because no one else would) called “Writers on the Storm” The irony of her request is that she absolutely stole Justin’s story about when he was in trouble a few years back and turned him into a 14 year old girl for this book. Then she added every cliché possible and used absolutely no imagination whatsoever! After he told me what she wanted I read the sample…you can too if you can stomach it.
Here is a brief overview:
Until now, the most important thing in 14-year-old Cornelia Drake’s life was maintaining her rightful place just outside the most popular clique at Storm River High School. But when she is sentenced to community service for writing a racial slur against a Muslim teacher, Mrs. Hakim, Cornelia’s world comes crashing down. She is forced to join Mrs. Hakim’s writing club, Writers on the Storm, where Cornelia is introduced to a group of extraordinary people from all walks of life, including Admeta Vasquez, a classmate who makes no bones about despising Cornelia. When the two rivals become unlikely friends, they are thrown a curve ball when they discover that Mrs. Hakim has breast cancer and may not make it. Cornelia is forced to choose between her precious clique and her new found friends. She can take the easy road or stand and fight alongside the teacher she once despised.
Read the whole sample of shit here http://www.smashwords.com/books/view/45074
Cornelia (cause ya know all the hip young girls want to have the name Cornelia) wears pink Chanel suits and Versace shoes (cause all the hip young girls want to wear old lady pink chanel suits instead of Michael Kors or Vera Wang). Since she wanted to give this a California feel Cornelia lives in “Price Valley”(sic Hill) near the corner of Glenway and Gilsey close to Beech (the road we lived on when my sister was born). Cornelia’s Boyfriend is a hippy-like young man named Chad not be confused with my son’s hippy-like best friend Chad and her rival is a peppy little cheerleader named McKenzie, Kenzie for short not to be confused with my son’s girlfriend Mckenzie, Kenzie for short. The judge calls her a "stuck-up, spoiled rotten little hooligan" ...yes hooligan about 15 times between page 9 and 12. She uses "spanglish" as dialog in one place and then explains what spanglish is...like her readers are complete idiots. the best part however when she uses the dialog "wow, Cornelia, harsh much?". What is this Clueless?
You get the idea. It’s crap.
The worst part is she thinks it is good. You can not talk down to your readers. If your target audience is the young adult reader you can talk to them as if they are 5. Young adults are just that...they understand what spanglish is and you can use harsher words than holligan...really who uses the word hooligan? At least "punk" would have brought her into the 90's but this is definately NOT modern tween fiction.
It is incredibly humorous for me to read however since I know all of these people and how she stole their identities for this book. Writers usually draw on their experience but don’t blatantly steal other people’s lives and call it a work of fiction…. At least not credible authors. Don’t get me wrong…Sis has written some well thought out articles and been published in several magazines and newspapers…I just think she should stick to that cause this piece of crap…it ain’t gonna sell to nooooooooo body.
Although my friend Stevie wants to know if she called my sister and told her she was a friend of mine could she get a discount or even get an autographed copy….I love my friends!