if there are no witnesses, there is no crime. Part II

[lady_quark]

Ha. Second chapter and it only took me 15 days .... :s

Title: If there are no witnesses, there is no crime. AU. (2/?)
Pairing: Wayne Rooney / Cristiano Ronaldo
Rating: R
Word Count: 2445
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Part One

Comments

[juliealmeida]

LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE this fic!

and LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE (you get the point I believe xD) YOU! :D :D :D

Your writing is magnificient!

[lady_quark]

oh, now that is some lovely feedback to wake up to...
Thanks!! :D

And I'm more than happy that there seems to be - at least some few people - out there who can work with this idea. Glad you love (I believe that was the word you used, no? :P) it .. and I'm hoping you'll like the next chapters just as much.
:D

[karneol_vision]

ARGH!!!!! I'm crushing so hard on this! ｡&hearts ‿ &hearts｡

"Love" Yes! "Magnificent"! Oh God, so totally....

Seriously, you've got that incredible talent of making one feel directly immersed in the action, and drawn in by the characters' feelings and thoughts. It's like I'm sitting there in that car, watching the outside, and the lights, being lulled to sleep by the sounds and the motions... and Cris starting to think of his past... this is so wonderfully done. I even get how Wayne's hand on Cris' thigh must feel.

And... that... *gestures* thing between them. I can't even describe. It's so complex, so many layers. Trough these two chapters only they're already such intricate characters, and te conflict in Cris, along with Wayne's tenderness and how he takes care of Cris... that made my eyes water...

... Not to mention the ending with all of its passion and brilliant 'drama' and how hot it was while emotionally tugging on you somehow.

God, this is so beautiful.

[lady_quark]

*tries to catch you up*
No crushing on my stories, hun, this leads to disappointment in the end in 3/5 cases ... :s

But, I'm happy to hear that my words are somehow able to get you into the story immediately. That's the thing I am worried the most about, but if that one works, if you can connect with the story somehow, than all is fine ... at least for now. ^^
Also, I didn't want to post the scene from Cris' past as a completely incoherent flashback, so I had to come up with something ... it was a spontaneous idea, but I think it worked quite well. Not it doesn't sound too sudden ...

& I'm glad you liked the ending as well. That took me the longest to write, I didn't want to mess up any characterisation I had already built up, but what can I say ... Wayne was practically giving me this glance as well, so I had no other choice but to write it this way ...

&hearts
You have no idea, how much your enthusiasm carries me through writing the story ... :)

[karneol_vision]

I'll have to crush harder then, so that the idea of disappointing me will make you feel very unwell.

And all IS fine so far :DDD And the flashback fit in very smoothly and nicely where you placed it!

I'm wondering now in what way you thought you might mess up a characterisation in the ending...

Ha, you have no idea what it means for me to get to read this story.

[karneol_vision]

Lol, you know, my problem with this story is that trying to picture what they look like and what they could look like, etc. keeps my mind off more important things I need to work on xD But my hand is hurting from having spent an entire hour on drawing hair (and I'm not even finished with that) anyway.

[lady_quark]

OH!
... well, ehrm, sorry for distracting you ...?
;D

Also, whose hair took you an hour - and longer - to work on? Must have been someone of Marouane Fellaini's type ... ;D

[karneol_vision]

Lol! xD I'll live....

But argh... hair is killing me, I love drawing it and working with it, but it's so damn hard work for me. No, it's no one like him^^ but dark hair is always harder to do than light *sigh*

[lady_quark]

... you still refuse to give me a name, don't you ... ?
*huffs*

[kitty69lover]

this was excellent!!! the writing is so rich, elegant, beautiful and flowing. the plot is beyond awesome. the flashback really intrigued me, as i'm now trying to imagine what was that place Cristiano was at with Nani and the other boys.

and well, i never liked Rooney outside his footie skills, but he's quite magnetic here, he emanates some sort of weird force, the power of a professional.

loved it, i want more!!

[lady_quark]

*blushes*
Oh hun, you're feedback is flattering me ... also, pssssh, I'm more than happy that you're still around for this chapter. Seriously. :)
*hugs*

Oh, the other place to be honest I'm at considering ways how I could "enlighten" this place a bit more, but as all of the happenings there are set in the past .... we'll see if - and I hope that - I'll find a way ...

Also, oh, the Wayne effect. Glad it has caught you as well ...

&hearts &hearts
There will be more ... I'm just not sure, when ... :s

[agnes_wonka7]

I liked it a lot! though I didn't get the first part. Is Cris a prostitute boy or sth?

[lady_quark]

First of all I'm glad to hear that you liked it! :)

And second, oh, now that you mention it I have to say that you're probably right and one doesn't catch it on the first read: The part you're referring to is a flashback showing how Wayne and Cris met for the first time, no? And the second part of it is Cris being at this big house (well, it's big in my head) where he lives with many other boys. ... I can't give away too much, yet, but prostitue boy sounds like a fitting description, yes. ;D)