[chicago fire] fic | What I Got Wrong

[waltzmatildah]

Title | What I Got Wrong
Fandom | Chicago Fire
Characters | Kelly Severide + Leslie Shay
Word Count | 1000
Rating | MA [language]
Summary | An AU for immediately following the fight between Kelly and Leslie in episode 1x10
Author’s Note | This is for citron_presse for her prompt what if you should decide, that you don’t want me there by your side… for the chicagofire_tv

Comments

[catteo]

Right, so, coherent commenting time. I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!

I think that the style works perfectly for this sort of thing - it really enhances the way that I think Severide's thinking would be - all over the place, disjointed and introspective. You've basically nailed it and I want to read this sort of style forever. Whatever would we do without Don?! But really, you've done fabulously with it. I really liked the screenplay paragraph! (If you want to AO3 it then email me and I'll do my best to talk you through it - I may need help with the other bits of formatting!).

I ADORE how raw and unapologetic this is. Severide knows that he's falling apart, but he also knows that he's trying to be better. I really liked the last paragraph where you kind of tie it all together and make it seem as though just the mere fact of Shay being back is going to make it better. And the way that he acknowledges that he really needs her is glorious. This is really the best kind of gen/BFF fic - angsty and full of feels!

The bit with 'Friend' was PERFECTO.

And the good person vs. A Good Person made me want to weep for him. Because he really is a good person, he just doesn't know how to be. And the prose somehow makes that so clear without being obvious about it. Love, love, LOVE.

More of this please and thank you!!!!

[citron_presse]

And the good person vs. A Good Person made me want to weep for him. Because he really is a good person, he just doesn't know how to be. And the prose somehow makes that so clear without being obvious about it.

Oh, THIS! I forgot - maybe fortunately, because catteo said it beautifully, and I can just steal her words!

[waltzmatildah]

I've stolen her words on several occasions! They're very good words :)

[waltzmatildah]

HELLO!

How is your day going? I hope that you have had time to watch the newest episode. citron_presse and I have already engaged in a D&M about it, and we could really use your input!

In other news, THANK YOU FOR YOUR LOVELY COMMENT! Whatever would we do without Don?! INDEED, INDEED!!! Thank you to Don, also!!

And the prose somehow makes that so clear without being obvious about it. Yay! And I think that's the way this kind of format has to be used to make it work, so I'm SO GLAD for this comment! :)

THANK YOU THANK YOU!

[catteo]

Where is this D&M happening!?!! Point me to it. I have CONTRIBUTIONS to make.

Although they are not all positive.

And you are WELCOME for the lovely comment. It was well deserved!

[waltzmatildah]

No, our D&M to date has also been less than positive!! Haha!

It is happening... here...

http://citron-presse.livejournal.com/86975.html?thread=1127103#t1127103