The Deer Woman

[walkawayslowly]

Holy crap! Not only did I finish a challenge, I finished a challenge early. This is cause for celebration, friends. Maybe I'll reward myself with ice cream.

Title: The Deer Woman
Author: Merrin/walkawayslowly
Pairing: Sam/Dean
Rating: Mmm... PG 13 ish.
Summary: Maybe they feel a little more guilty than they let on.
Word Count: 1513
Author's Notes: written for

Comments

[pynk_spyder]

It seems I missed this story when you posted, so I'm forced to conclude that I am completely lame. That said, onto the feedback!

"Wild crashing through the underbrush, nothing like what he was taught and he knows Dean’ll give him crap for it later, for tripping on the tree root, leaping straight into a bush, and the harsh, gulping pants[...]"

I really like this beginning segment. It creates such a frantic scene right off in my mind, which I hope is what you were going for. I especially loved the line describing what Sam sees in the deer woman's face; Very touching.

The banter between the boys is adorable. This?:

"“What’s a patronus?” Dean asks, and Sam wonders if he can pretend he passed out and instead Sam just says, “help me up.”

...so cute. :) I notice the scenes with just the boys have sort of a softer, slower feel to them than the rest of the story. The urgency is still there, but it has a more...how do I say this exactly..."comfortable" feel? Like, even though they're focused on the case, that moment alone together allows them to breathe a little. Very nicely done, and I'm happy to report, not being an avid reader of Wincest, that it didn't squick me at all. (In fact, I think the last time I read Wincest was the other story you posted. *L*)

On a side note, I love that you picked this particular legend, as it's something I grew up with. Around here, it serves as sort of a warning tale against picking up hitchhikers at night, so different context but same idea. I'm actually attending a powwow this week, though, so it probably wasn't the best time for me to read it. *nervous laugh*

[walkawayslowly]

You leave the best feedback, seriously. Also, I'm pretty sure no one saw this fic, I'm kind of surprised you did. :p

On a "the other story I posted" note, did you see that there's an EPILOGUE? :D

Back to this one, I was so ridiculously nervous about posting it, what with not being Native American and all and I'm kind of really glad you don't think the whole thing is a lame and slightly insulting. And as far as this particular brand of the legend goes, you don't have much to worry about it you're not a rapist. :D

In conclusion: You're awesome. :D