Well, you know how much I adore this fic (despite being almost an entire week late on my comment *embarrassed blush*)
You handled the first part with such dignity and class, and that's hard to do when you're dealing with a much-older man and child, especially considering their "history"...indeed, this is heart-warming, even: Standing naked in the Mars’ Evergreen shrubs is almost always a bad idea. I tap on Veronica’s bedroom window, and she knows the routine. She’s covering her eyes with one hand while she slides up the glass pane with her other.
“Logan!” She’s excited, and I’ll never get tired of a Veronica who is happy to see me, no matter what her age.
You pepper the fic with humor and wit, and it's just beautiful... THIS had me bleat with laughter: “Mariah Carey, Veronica? Really?”
She looks at me innocently and shrugs. “Wanna listen to the Ace of Base tape I got for Easter?”
“Thanks, but I’d rather have a lobotomy.”
This, too, was just precious: “Here,” she says, handing me the paper. “I got a B
( ... )
(despite being almost an entire week late on my comment *embarrassed blush*)
It usually takes me awhile to reply to comments, so don't worry about it!
Of course, I haven't read the book yet, so I'm not sure if the author used the same technique, but I loved the reference to the OK City bombing, and that Veronica would be cognizant, even at such a young age, that such a thing had happened and would expect the bomber to be punished.
There's a brief mention of 9/11 in the book, but in real-time. So I kind of got my idea from that, very generally. I think Veronica 1.0 was very much sunshine and kittens, but she wasn't too far off the the girl she became; that was just something that was brought out in her. The absolute views on right and wrong and justice? I think with having a father like Keith, that that was probably always there. I even pictured Keith sitting down and having a fatherly talk with her about the horrible thing that happened that day, to reassure her that he would keep her safe and that the bad guys would
( ... )
This made my heart ACHE: “Yeah,” he agrees. The smile on his face slowly starts to disappear as he becomes lost in his thoughts. “Do I…Do I ever tell you anything about us? I mean, are we together?”
I look down at the carpet and trace an imaginary pattern with my toe. “No. You never say.”
He laughs softly, one part bitterness, one part tiredness. I know exactly how he feels.
“I miss you,” I blurt out unexpectedly, surprising even myself.
He looks up at me and nods. “I miss you, too. You couldn’t begin to know how much.”
Awwww! I want to schmoosh them both in a big hug.
And I love how you work canon into the story so flawlessly, and yet, subtly, particularly HERE: I nod sadly and look back down at the carpet. I just want so much for Logan to already be the man I’ve known since I was a little girl. I know it takes time, of course, but I want it now. I see glimmers of him sometimes, and if I were honest with myself, I could admit that I see it more and more every time I talk with him. But I can’t risk it just yet; this Logan is
( ... )
Veronica's disappointment in Logan is such a hotbutton issue, and yet here, you explain it so effortlessly. I just love it.
Thank you! That was important to me, because I'm one of the people that just doesn't get why she rides him so hard in that icky, UNFUN way. Poor baby. So even though there's no way in hell this could ever be revealed on the show (and if it was, I'd totally sue RT. And then AN would sue me...) I could explain it and try to understand it.
I still don't know what the fuck real Veronica's problem is, though. :/
"Standing naked in the Mars’ Evergreen shrubs is almost always a bad idea."
Best way to start a fanfic ever. :D And now I really need to find this book.
I love the concept of time-travel and the way you weave it here is so compelling. I was really touched almost to tears by Logan's encounter with his mother. There's such a complex array emotions that you are evoking through this. Keep writing VM fanfic!
I really loved the dialogue in this too. Young Veronica and Older Logan is such a strange combo but you pull it off seamlessly and hilariously (the book report, her teeny-bopper music). Anyway I can't wait any longer, I really want to get to the next part.
I really loved the dialogue in this too. Young Veronica and Older Logan is such a strange combo but you pull it off seamlessly and hilariously (the book report, her teeny-bopper music).
Hee, thanks! I have such a thing for Logan and kids, so Logan and young Veronica, while completely impossible, would just kill me on screen.
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You handled the first part with such dignity and class, and that's hard to do when you're dealing with a much-older man and child, especially considering their "history"...indeed, this is heart-warming, even: Standing naked in the Mars’ Evergreen shrubs is almost always a bad idea. I tap on Veronica’s bedroom window, and she knows the routine. She’s covering her eyes with one hand while she slides up the glass pane with her other.
“Logan!” She’s excited, and I’ll never get tired of a Veronica who is happy to see me, no matter what her age.
You pepper the fic with humor and wit, and it's just beautiful... THIS had me bleat with laughter: “Mariah Carey, Veronica? Really?”
She looks at me innocently and shrugs. “Wanna listen to the Ace of Base tape I got for Easter?”
“Thanks, but I’d rather have a lobotomy.”
This, too, was just precious: “Here,” she says, handing me the paper. “I got a B ( ... )
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It usually takes me awhile to reply to comments, so don't worry about it!
Of course, I haven't read the book yet, so I'm not sure if the author used the same technique, but I loved the reference to the OK City bombing, and that Veronica would be cognizant, even at such a young age, that such a thing had happened and would expect the bomber to be punished.
There's a brief mention of 9/11 in the book, but in real-time. So I kind of got my idea from that, very generally. I think Veronica 1.0 was very much sunshine and kittens, but she wasn't too far off the the girl she became; that was just something that was brought out in her. The absolute views on right and wrong and justice? I think with having a father like Keith, that that was probably always there. I even pictured Keith sitting down and having a fatherly talk with her about the horrible thing that happened that day, to reassure her that he would keep her safe and that the bad guys would ( ... )
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I look down at the carpet and trace an imaginary pattern with my toe. “No. You never say.”
He laughs softly, one part bitterness, one part tiredness. I know exactly how he feels.
“I miss you,” I blurt out unexpectedly, surprising even myself.
He looks up at me and nods. “I miss you, too. You couldn’t begin to know how much.”
Awwww! I want to schmoosh them both in a big hug.
And I love how you work canon into the story so flawlessly, and yet, subtly, particularly HERE: I nod sadly and look back down at the carpet. I just want so much for Logan to already be the man I’ve known since I was a little girl. I know it takes time, of course, but I want it now. I see glimmers of him sometimes, and if I were honest with myself, I could admit that I see it more and more every time I talk with him. But I can’t risk it just yet; this Logan is ( ... )
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Awwww! I want to schmoosh them both in a big hug.
Hee.
Veronica's disappointment in Logan is such a hotbutton issue, and yet here, you explain it so effortlessly. I just love it.
Thank you! That was important to me, because I'm one of the people that just doesn't get why she rides him so hard in that icky, UNFUN way. Poor baby. So even though there's no way in hell this could ever be revealed on the show (and if it was, I'd totally sue RT. And then AN would sue me...) I could explain it and try to understand it.
I still don't know what the fuck real Veronica's problem is, though. :/
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Best way to start a fanfic ever. :D And now I really need to find this book.
I love the concept of time-travel and the way you weave it here is so compelling. I was really touched almost to tears by Logan's encounter with his mother. There's such a complex array emotions that you are evoking through this. Keep writing VM fanfic!
I really loved the dialogue in this too. Young Veronica and Older Logan is such a strange combo but you pull it off seamlessly and hilariously (the book report, her teeny-bopper music). Anyway I can't wait any longer, I really want to get to the next part.
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I really loved the dialogue in this too. Young Veronica and Older Logan is such a strange combo but you pull it off seamlessly and hilariously (the book report, her teeny-bopper music).
Hee, thanks! I have such a thing for Logan and kids, so Logan and young Veronica, while completely impossible, would just kill me on screen.
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