fic: spread out against the sky (remus/sirius, g)

[virginia_bell]

Oh dear. My Muse has suddenly decided to shake off its dormancy, and thus, there is (really bad ;__;) fic in honour of wanderlight's birthday. Even if it is just a little late.

Title: Spread Out Against the Sky
Author: V.M. Bell
Disclaimer: Everything belongs to JKR. Title stolen from T.S. Eliot's "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock."
Summary: To pretend

Comments

[softlyforgotten]

Awh. ♥ Too cute; I love the dynamics you've captured between them.

[virginia_bell]

Thank you. :)

[safebox]

Oh that's so lovely! *grins happily* I really like the concept of this, and the descriptions of the view are fabulous.

his eyes fell to the horizon, where the stars kissed their reflections in the lake in perfect parallel.

I love that line especially.

[virginia_bell]

Thank you! ♥

[lareinenoire]

Oh, this is a lovely piece! Very evocative. I love the descriptions of the stars, but I've got a major weakness for those. ;)

[virginia_bell]

Thanks for reading! :)

[werewolf_lib]

Lovely. I especially liked how you described the complex methods by which Remus excuses their holding hands and his reasons for doing so; it's very him.

[virginia_bell]

Thank you so much! ♥

[tinyholidays]

Lovely seems to be the descriptor-du-jour. I'm half-hoping that this will transition into a full-on make out fest.

Also, I think I want to try my hand at this abandoned quotes thing. I like the efficiency therein, and, really, finding another way to say "says" all the time can become rather tedious.

[virginia_bell]

In a future, non-existent fic, I'm sure it will. ;D

I can't remember where or when it was, but at some point in my education as an amateur writer, I was told that not using the whole "he/she/it/God said/synonym of your choice" thing is much more along the lines of the show-don't-tell principle. And, hee, it lets you use "said" all the time without feeling too repetitive!