DRABBLES; 15-minute challenges
15-minute drabbles ; various pairings
roselit @ viewscape
angst, gen ; varying wordcounts
A/N: These are short pieces I wrote for several of the challenges on kpfw 9.0, in which writers were given 15 minutes to produce something based on a given prompt (pictures, poems/words, songs). All of these are stand-alone writings, unrelated to one another.
( let's paint the picture of the perfect place; )
roselit @ viewscape
angst, gen ; varying wordcounts
A/N: These are short pieces I wrote for several of the challenges on kpfw 9.0, in which writers were given 15 minutes to produce something based on a given prompt (pictures, poems/words, songs). All of these are stand-alone writings, unrelated to one another.
( let's paint the picture of the perfect place; )
If this is speedwriting drabbles, JUST KEEP WRITING THIS WAY. This is wow, amazing.
You've written drabbles that seem to somehow fit each other but don't. They all have the same connection and if read chronically it could make sense and that's whats beautiful about it.
You're Junsu is heartbreaking but so warm, as if he wants whats best for Jaejoong rather than force his own happiness at the expense of his bandmates.
Your comparisons within each drabble just continously blow me away and pull me right in.
In the first drabble this line. WOW.
Jaejoong gives him a look, the same one that Junsu swears says everything, but he's just not listening quite right
That it literally just Jaejoong saying Yes I did it but I did it for you with you and not with whom you think I did. And its just Junsu's so not oblivious but he's so unaware of Jaejoong, that Jaejoong is such a confusing spot because of Junsu's desire and love that he doesn't want to interpret something for what it isn't. (even if it so obviously is).
With HoSu was an added bonus so very much so, I think with JaeSu you know whats happening now but with the HoSu it's like what's happened before and why its Jaejoong and not so much Yunho anymore.
when lips meet his, firm and sure, Junsu finds his voice just enough to moan.
a;slkdjfa;sceral;skdfj YES. ♥
And then you bring in this JaeMin and thats exactly it isn't it? That Jaemin just didn't quite work out as much as they hoped it did but like a bad habit, they keep going back and back and back.
ignores the promise of bruises in the morning, slumped between man and wall like a soldier who's lost the will to fight long ago.
ANOTHER QUOTE! But skalksj you compare the will of Jaejoong to the will of a fallen soilder. Like they both just have no energy to fight the war, to fight the battle to do the right thing (or wrong thing in either matter) but its what's right in that moment and its what the comparison does to the scene that makes that line so amazing.
THIS WAS JUST askjf drabbles I feel are always a little disappointing because you only have a certain word limit to put so much information inside and if really well done you end up with something that the reader wants so badly. The continuation of the plot or the characters or just the initiation of the rest. But these .. these were fantastic. I do wish there was more but its still so satifsying like what you've written is a story of its own. These 200 some what words are enough to be able to create its own story and give its own ending. The middle is elusive but its very VERY well done.
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these were meant to be stand-alone pieces, completely unrelated, but i'm really happy that you kind of interpreted it all differently. i love hearing readers' thoughts and favorite lines because more often than not, i don't see things the way readers do, even if i wrote them. ♥ i especially love your interpretation of the jaejoong-soldier simile. :)
i agree about what you said on drabbles! honestly, people sometimes assume that drabbles are easier to write, but i find them the hardest of all. they're definitely limiting, so it's difficult to capture everything just right. granted, these were written without word limits, but the time limit was the most challenging because i honestly am one of the slowest writers in fandom, LOL.
this entire comment got too lengthy, i'm sorry! ;; but you had me grinning so wide as i was reading your response, and i'm really ecstatic & flattered you took the time to pen down your thoughts. :') thank you so much! ♥♥
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