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First Times (Logan/Veronica) NC-17

Jan 25, 2008 21:20

First Times (Logan/Veronica) NC-17
By: mojo
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers: up to 2.22 .The summer post season 2 finale.
Word count: 5170
Disclaimer: Unfortunatelly not mine,all belongs to RT.But I certainly wouldn't mind getting Logan as a b-day prezzie,with a bow on his.......ummm.....arm .
Characters/Pairings: LoVe, forever and for always.
Summary: One-shot, ( Read more... )

nc-17, doniczka, veronica, logan

Comments 13

bkell13 January 26 2008, 18:24:34 UTC

Awesome story! I loved the end about Duncan, it was hilarious. Great work, can't wait to read future work from you!

doniczka January 26 2008, 18:35:02 UTC

Aww,thank you.I'm so happy that you enjoyed my story:)
And yeah,I just HAD to bash Donut at least a lil' bit,I hate him,and I'm evil,muahahaha.LoL.

Oh,and I can't wait to see the next chapter of Welcome to Neptune!;)

myalias88 January 26 2008, 19:05:58 UTC

Glad you posted it mojo. :D

I love how you have Logan struggling to be the "normal" boyfriend and that Veronica ackowledges that she doesn't want normal. And the end was funny, gotta love Duncan bashing. :P

doniczka January 26 2008, 19:22:21 UTC

At least one of us is,Marsie....*sighs* :P I'm still gonna whine about it to you,don't worry,lol.

Thanks,I always thought that they should actually show us Veronica's epiphany about the 'being normal' thing more clearly,that they should accentuate that she didn't go back to Logan just b/c he was there,but b/c she realised that he was her kind of normal;)

Duncan bashing will never get old,lol.:P

xhoney_bee January 27 2008, 03:04:11 UTC

aw that was so adorable. i loved how Logan tried to be "normal", eep.

doniczka January 27 2008, 11:26:37 UTC

Thank you,I'm glad you liked it:)

poniesforall January 28 2008, 19:22:39 UTC

"And hello to you too" responded Logan, biting down a smirk, the naughty one, that always meant that he had some witty retort, that was just begging to be released from his mouth. <-I love this description. Perfect. Between his eyes and his mouth, something always looked like it was fighting it's way out.

I like the fact that Veronica has to explain that Logan is HER normal. It's his all that makes her.

It was sweet that he was nervous at first. Because I don't care who you are, but when you first make love to someone you truly love, you ARE nervous. Good job at conveying that.

"My existence is not complete without you, anymore." She admitted to him huskily. This was so beautiful and I think that Veronica might have even admitted this, if only in her head. But Logan would have known it.

Fantastic job. It really did not seem like your first fic.

doniczka January 28 2008, 20:38:00 UTC

*blushes furiously* Thank you so much for your kind words.

Logan is just such a smartmouth and you can ALWAYS sense when he has sth to say,it's just that sparkle in his eyes and that little twitch of his lips :)

Yeah,I always wanted her to admitt it out loud.

Of course!No matter how experienced he may be it was probably his first time that he actually MADE LOVE(I don't believe that what he felt for Lilly was love with capital L).I'm glad you noticed it,I really wanted to show it but I wasn't sure if I achieved it;)

Aww,thank you yet again.I'm sure she knew it,even if it wasn't said,it was safely tucked in her heart;)

Really?The fact that you think so makes me really happy.Thank you for your detailed comment;)

onceuponapillow January 28 2008, 19:53:13 UTC

Yay! It's finally up. Not as bad as you thought huh? ;P

Anyway, I love the fic. It's always nice to see Veronica acknowledge that the whole "white picket fence" normal picture isn't for her.

And Logan is just such a sexy sweetheart-most of the time lol

The sex was hot. I loved it.

I also liked the Titanic mention. That scene with the older couple is really sad and touching. Although the one that really gets me is the mom putting her kids to bed, knowing it's gonna be the last time and she can't do anthing to save them.

Oh, and I loved the slight Duncan bashing. It's always fun when people poke fun at Duncan.

Great fic. Love it. And I'm seriously jealous that your fist fic is so great while the first fics I wrote are so god awful its embarrassing lol.

Keep up the great writing.

doniczka January 31 2008, 12:37:18 UTC

OMG,I swear I answered to your comment the day you left it!Throw Piz's(ewwww)heads at LJ,not me!:P

Yeah,it is.I still think she got hit in the head somewhere in between season 1 and 2,lol.

When he isn't a sexy sweetheart he's a sexy badass,sexy OPJ,sexy smarthmouth,sexy evildoer....sexy sexy sexy EVERYTHING!!!;)

*blushes* Thank you.

Yeah,that scene is heartbreaking too.But it's the one with the older couple that always leaves me in tears.

*giggles*He just makes it so easy to make fun of him!

Aww,thank you:)

I'll try my best:)