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veronica_rich

POTC fic: "Near-Death Becomes Her" (part 3/3)

May 06, 2009 19:28

Title: "Near-Death Becomes Her" (part 3 of 3)
Rating: R for "rowdy" (language and humor, that is)
All other summaries and disclaimers may be found in Part 1. Part 2 can be found here.

( Alas, washing and mending sails was an omnipresent chore. )

Comments 13

roguedemon May 7 2009, 03:36:47 UTC

I just read the entire thing. This was just lovely. It was really funny and yet incredibly poignant at the same time. A mixture of humor and pain -- I suppose that's life, isn't it?

I loved the ogling of the captain --obviously, that's what anyone would do!

Gibb's reaction to Prissy's simple statement that of course, Jack is after Will's "boons" was priceless. She's probably be a bit shocked if she knew what was really going on! And then she'd want to watch...

And at the end, Jack putting his foot in it was predictably hilarious. Poor Will, always doomed to disappointment when it comes to tales of his mother and father's relationship. It's hard to let go of that kind of thing, even when you are an adult. And Will is, after all, only in his early 20s.

Normally I'm not that into OCs but you did a fine job with this one. I like stories told from an outsiders point of view from time to time. When someone can really pull off an OC, they've made it to a different level as a writer --Well done!

veronica_rich May 8 2009, 02:02:04 UTC

Well, *I* would definitely waste much time ogling the captain, if I were there. How could you not??

She's probably be a bit shocked if she knew what was really going on! And then she'd want to watch...

I tried to write this to be as slashy or as not as the reader wants it to be. Broad enjoyment and all that. But you and I think much the same way. :-)

I don't have Jack verbally screw up nearly enough as he should. I was trying to correct that. LOL. I'm glad you liked it!

keechakatt May 7 2009, 05:15:53 UTC

I read all three parts in one setting. I loved this, from the humor, the action. I love the interaction between Will and Bill. Your OC are very believable and well written. I really enjoyed them both.

veronica_rich May 8 2009, 01:53:34 UTC

Thanks for the comment of confidence - I always write these for me, but it makes me much happier when other readers like them as well. :-)

ladymouse2 May 7 2009, 07:22:26 UTC

There's so much to like in this starting with it's nice length, there's a fully developed plot here. Yumm ( ... )

veronica_rich May 8 2009, 02:25:56 UTC

It's possible if Prissy were around longer she could counsel Will on how to accept his father's wandering eye ... and other parts, where women are concerned. (As it is, in my personal fanon, Will does the same thing, but he only goes between two people - better? worse? you decide. *G*)

Again, I am glad for your detailed feedback and attention to the detail I put in the story, and always happy to hear from you! Thanks!

kseenaa May 7 2009, 12:18:53 UTC

Oh what an ending. A bit sad what with Griselde dying.. But very good to. :-) I really liked how you wrote all this. A lovely little story about how life on the Dutchman can be. Well... sorta life. ;-) I loved it very much.

veronica_rich May 8 2009, 01:51:34 UTC

I figure if they can feel and sense, they're alive ... somewhere. Much as I like the stories where things are dead, I also like "life" stories about the Dutchman and its captain and crew.

And, the occasional visitor. *G*

Thanks for reading through it!

a_silver_rose May 7 2009, 23:49:13 UTC

Much enjoyed. I kind had a snicker at Jack being after Will's "boons", and liked the relationship between Bootsrap Bill and Grizzy.

veronica_rich May 8 2009, 01:52:18 UTC

See, for all the innuendo, it's only as slashy as you want it to be, right? Or not at all?

Thanks! :-D