Okay first off, A+++++ plot setup. I actually visited Japan a couple months ago and it was just so cool to see all these places that I saw show up in the fic (Prometheus at the top of the TT! Tentacle monsters near Condommania! OH OF COURSE). One of the reasons I love the PJO series so much is because of this exact tongue-in-cheek play on myths and modern life and it was just fantastic. The fact that it ties both into recent events and the end of the book was great as well; you could totally see this happening plausibly in their future without deviating from the books and the emotional impact of the split on all the characters that I already love was all BAM, OUCH MY HEART.
The prose was also amazing, there were several times when I actually was cracking up and reading things to my sibs out loud they were just so hilarious. I love every single one of the OCs-- the Justins were hilarious and aw, Jennifer ♥ ALSO BLACKJACK NAMING HIS BABY POKERFACE AFTER LADY GAGA SFHJSHFJKSFH AHAHA.
My highlight was definitely Nico and Percy’s relationship though. Just. Overwhelming. You wrote them as the dumb boys they are while still showing their banter and stupid stupid codependent relationship. Percy getting attached at the beginning to Nico’s power read so true to me. This is a boy who spent his whole life needing to claw his way through every obstacle, he would be naturally drawn towards someone who could fight with him evenly. And Nico’s confession scene near the end where he said he’d make Percy the strongest person in history if he only asked? Oh, god perfect.
Annabeth was so so breathtaking as well, I loved that she was the fierce bitch I know and love and didn’t let Percy destroy their friendship just because they weren’t dating anymore dfsdfh I LOVE THIS GIRL ♥
Um, the only criticism I have is to watch the epithets? It wasn’t a huge thing, and god knows I loved it anyways, but at times when they randomly appeared it did get a bit awkward and threw me off a bit. So, that.
TL;DR THIS IS AMAZING I NOMINATE YOU QUEEN OF FANDOM HERE IS YOUR TIARA.
THIS COMMENT TOTALLY MAKES UP FOR THE FACT THAT THERE WEREN'T ANY ALL WEEKEND. *flails!*
I ... I don't even know what to say. I mean, fdjsijfrlkc, this is the first fic of this length I've written, so most of the time I just felt like I was flailing around in the dark :D:D SO A MILLION HEARTS IN MY EYES FOR YOU, I am SO glad you liked it this much to leave the MOST EPIC COMMENT! And thanks for the concrit -- I also didn't have anyone to proof-read, so thank you!
AND THIS IS THE FIRST GREAT SPARKLY TIARA I HAVE EVER GOTTEN, AHAHA. I shall cherish it like a cherishing thing.
And yes, Japan! Were you just in Tokyo or where all did you see?
The prose was also amazing, there were several times when I actually was cracking up and reading things to my sibs out loud they were just so hilarious. I love every single one of the OCs-- the Justins were hilarious and aw, Jennifer ♥ ALSO BLACKJACK NAMING HIS BABY POKERFACE AFTER LADY GAGA SFHJSHFJKSFH AHAHA.
My highlight was definitely Nico and Percy’s relationship though. Just. Overwhelming. You wrote them as the dumb boys they are while still showing their banter and stupid stupid codependent relationship. Percy getting attached at the beginning to Nico’s power read so true to me. This is a boy who spent his whole life needing to claw his way through every obstacle, he would be naturally drawn towards someone who could fight with him evenly. And Nico’s confession scene near the end where he said he’d make Percy the strongest person in history if he only asked? Oh, god perfect.
Annabeth was so so breathtaking as well, I loved that she was the fierce bitch I know and love and didn’t let Percy destroy their friendship just because they weren’t dating anymore dfsdfh I LOVE THIS GIRL ♥
Um, the only criticism I have is to watch the epithets? It wasn’t a huge thing, and god knows I loved it anyways, but at times when they randomly appeared it did get a bit awkward and threw me off a bit. So, that.
TL;DR THIS IS AMAZING I NOMINATE YOU QUEEN OF FANDOM HERE IS YOUR TIARA.
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I ... I don't even know what to say. I mean, fdjsijfrlkc, this is the first fic of this length I've written, so most of the time I just felt like I was flailing around in the dark :D:D SO A MILLION HEARTS IN MY EYES FOR YOU, I am SO glad you liked it this much to leave the MOST EPIC COMMENT! And thanks for the concrit -- I also didn't have anyone to proof-read, so thank you!
AND THIS IS THE FIRST GREAT SPARKLY TIARA I HAVE EVER GOTTEN, AHAHA. I shall cherish it like a cherishing thing.
And yes, Japan! Were you just in Tokyo or where all did you see?
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