Detective Conan | A Study in Grey (1/?)

[mandolin_minuet]

title: A Study in Grey (part one of ?)
fandom; pairing: Detective Conan; eventually Conan/Ai, gen and hints of Shinichi/Ran for now
rating: PG-13 to be safe
summary: Something is brewing over the birthplace of Sherlock Holmes-- a storm, of sorts. Key elements include as-of-yet unnamed alcoholic beverages, hotheaded detectives, and the strange

Comments

[rae00]

I was impressed with the realism of setting at the beginning, though of course it didn't last...Hopefully we'll see more of it when we get our hero(es?) to his favorite stage.

I like where this is going, and I'm very happy we have a new recruit who can get characterization right. A little bit awkward in one or two places (the line that begins "It was becoming a familiar routine..." could perhaps be reworded, for example), but that's the beta in me speaking. Well worth the read; I hope you continue.

As for the heart symbol, try "hearts;", with an ampersand in front. No spaces. Why Dag hasn't magically appeared (withpinksparklies) to tell you this before me, I have no idea.

[rae00]

Edit: Ahh, 'white heart outline,' not the regular black one. Tricky. Apparently it depends on both browser and font; try wrapping just that symbol in a font face= HTML tag. With face equal to a font like Batang which has everything. I'll give it a shot here.

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[mandolin_minuet]

I'm trying to strike a balance between describing certain settings and actually getting the plot/dialogue to move along. XD;;

It's not been beta'd yet, so maybe that's why... D: My writing is so erratic that I should find one, but I always feel self-conscious about it.

And the heart symbol works! Yay, thank youuu. I'll fix it ... soon. *oh god is so lazy*

[rae00]

Yeah; it seems to be working so far. I wouldn't worry too much about it...not that, judging from the rest of your comment, you're going to stop. XD

I'm actually the comm's beta, and I'd be happy to beta for you, but I've been piling myself with work lately and barely have any time. Maybe in a few months? If you keep posting I'll comment with a "Hey, I'm free now..." one of these days. Or you could e-mail things and they'll just sit quietly in my inbox until I have time to look them over.

Any time. ;P Hahahahahaha. I'm also supposedly the comm's laziest member. *mod who never tags or posts* Though I might hand that title off to you, looks like, 'specially if I get too lazy to work for it.

[mandolin_minuet]

It's a bad habit, although I find that lots of writers are invariably their own worst critics.

Whenever you have time is fine! :D I won't be terribly speedy since this is one of those that feels like it might be an epic, but I'm not sure exactly there it's going at the same time. >>;;

XDDD *would not fight you for it* Sharing is caring?

[rae00]

I think most artists in general are their own worst critics...that's one reason I'd never go into art. It'd take me hours to draw every line. XD;;

:o Then, sure, send stuff over to astarael00@hotmail.com whenever you want something betaed, and I'll get to it soon's I can.

XDDDD I'm not so good at the 'caring' part of that but how about we go with the lazy way out and just decide to both be the laziest members?