H/C poem: Lights

[veracifix]

'Thought i'd try my hand at a rhyming poem :) Since it is a narrative as well, i found it difficult to rhyme and walk along my plot line. I just hope you see the setting as i do.

It's short-esh, it's weird. But i do like the ending :)

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[veracifix]

because I often find it difficult to understand.
and ironically, that's why i like them :D haha, don't konw why either, maybe it's just figuring it out :P But thanks

[starhawk2005]

Nice! And, of course, gotta love the ending, heheh.

“Oh no doubt about that.
But it’s an invitation to those bad bad men…”
“Like you?”

Loved this part. And totally agree, he IS a bad bad man...but that's why we all want to screw him love him so. Or is that just me? *wink*

[veracifix]

Haha, no it's not just you *wink* ;]

[violette_b]

You never cease to amaze me, Erica. Wow. I love this and added it to my memories when I read it last night, but wasn't able to comment.

Amazing, amazing imagery and word usage and ryhme. Love this line epsecially:

Reminder nothing caught on file,
States the control of time is man’s.

Keep writing- I know I'll keep reading ;)

XOXO,
~Liz

[veracifix]

aw thankies :)

That line: States the control of time is man’s. i had to be creative, like hmm what rhymes with hands, and man's came close enough ;P

again, thankies, you're so sweet :3