Drabble for Vikki

Oct 12, 2005 09:28

My son is threatening my daughter with a butt-x-ray. Apparently it's where you x-ray people with your butt. Pheonxi is very putt off by this. I'm not touching it with a 10 foot pole ( Read more... )

cripple arc, fma: hohenheim, dubious con, fma, drabble, fma: ed, fic, rated: pg-13

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tir_synni October 12 2005, 17:03:47 UTC
That was . . . strangely lovely. And definitely put me in the mood for more H/E. *blinks* That last line hurt. *mems*

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velvet_mace October 12 2005, 17:13:10 UTC
Go write some!!!!

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tir_synni October 12 2005, 17:27:43 UTC
^^;;;; Don't tempt me.

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vikki October 12 2005, 17:19:03 UTC
DUUUUUUUUUUU it.

~~Vikki, making efforts to perpetuate the Hoho/Ed everywhere

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urplesquirrel October 12 2005, 17:04:54 UTC
???... Butt-X-ray?...

Your children frighten me, Vel.

I don't really like Hohenheim x Ed, but the drabble was very well done. The rationalization is well done, I like the way Hoho-papa seems to be trying to find a way that it's okay.

That last line must have been like a punch to the gut for Hoho, though.

And I'm just rambling now. I don't want to go and do my history.

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velvet_mace October 12 2005, 17:12:44 UTC
Yes, my children are frighteningly scatalogical in what they find funny. Butts are just the most halarious things. I think this is a potty training thing.

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devils_devotion October 12 2005, 17:05:28 UTC
...I still say this is great. This almost strikes me as SEMI-con, due to Ed's glaring indifference to the whole thing. Eerily enough, it sounds more like Hohenheim's saying all those things aloud to convince HIMSELF of the acceptability of all this, whereas Ed's uncharacteristic placidity suggests to me that he'd do ANYTHING to have his father play the role of anything but.

Blag! Just...really good. I think your fears from last night were ungrounded on this one. ;) I'd love it if it turned into a full fic, but at the same time I understand if you're not feeling inspired. ^____^

*LOVES ON BEFORE FLEEING!*

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velvet_mace October 12 2005, 17:11:45 UTC
Well, you know, if this inspires YOU to write something... go for it.

Right now though Roy is looking awfully sexy all tied up and covered with... mmm... oatmeal. Such a messy eater he is...

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devils_devotion October 12 2005, 17:14:25 UTC
Hey, I'm not arguing with more Pets. XDDDD

And *shrug* I dunno, maybe I'll see what I can come up with at a later date. BUT FOR NOW I REALLY NEED TO FINISH THAT ROY/WINRY THING, ARGH JFDF:"DLF:"DOP{WEFDKF:DLF"D:F AND SUCH.

...Oatmeal. Farewell, sanctity of my favorite breakfast food. *weeps for her loss of childhood*

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vikki October 12 2005, 17:17:25 UTC
THAT'S RIGHT, I EXPECT HOHOED FROM YOU SOMEDAY. SOON. >D

*hugs* seriously, I would *love* to see what you did with it.

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vikki October 12 2005, 17:14:47 UTC
Wow. .......... wow.

I love the last line. Blew me away. You can imagine it said with this kind of hard edge that tells Hohenhiem it's a blatant LIE. But the fact that he's saying it makes it some kind of justification ...

;____; Beautiful, thank you. =D

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velvet_mace October 12 2005, 17:54:11 UTC
It's all a lie, and they both know it. Hohenheim is so talking to himself.

I'm somewhat dissatisfied with Ed, he's not very ED like. More Al. I'd think that he'd have to be seriously depressed to be putting up with all this.

I guess I imagined the circumstances being, Ed alone in a strange land, crippled, penniless, alchemyless, friendless, nothing familiar except for his father. He utterly relys on Hohenheim for food, a place to sleep, the prosthetic that allow him to function, all of which can be taken away from him.

Now parents provide the necessities of life freely, but Hohenhiem is utterly rejecting the parent role. So here's Ed with no where to go, paying for his room and board with his body, because it's all he has (at the moment) to give.

It's kind of cliched.

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lykomancer October 12 2005, 17:16:56 UTC
Fuckin' ow.

DemiDevi's comment interests me-- Hohenheim would be the type to have justify it as much to himself...but then I wonder about Ed's seeming cruelty in responding to it. That last line is like smacking Hohenheim's fingers with a bluint cudgel, absolutely annhilating everything that's been said up to that point with something that's almost, but not quite sarcastic-seeming...
...but Vel is clever, and doesn't give us readers any adjectival clues as to the tone of voice with which it is said, meaning that interpretation is wide-open.
(Well, maybe not quite, considering the title.)
I like that.

Very nice for such a short piece!

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velvet_mace October 12 2005, 17:56:38 UTC
It was all Hohenheim rejecting Ed as a father, and at the same time justifying the acceptiblitity of being his lover. Ed's completely given in. The last line is really a slap.

I suppose I could do a few more ficlets to flesh out the circumstances for which this would be the inevitable outcome.

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