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PETS Chapter 9

Aug 15, 2005 15:03

Unbeta'd. Rough. This chapter is something of a let down from last one's hotness. I suppose that's just the way fics work. Call this the post orgasmic glow. This is a plot chapter, introducing a lot of new (canon) characters into the mix. And I've done what I've never done before. Written consensual canon sex. Amazing. Enjoy it because it ( Read more... )

fma, fma: gracia, fma: hughes, rated: nc-17, fic, pets

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Great follow-up anonymous August 15 2005, 22:22:24 UTC

I've been enjoying the story tremendously so far. Sorry I haven't posted before.

I had been wondering what was going on with Hughes. As horrific and and absorbing as Roy's experience has been to read, it's nice to see you are doing a well-rounded story. This is really some of your best writing (I've been catching up since I discovered "Pets"). Keep up the good work.

Re: Great follow-up anonymous August 15 2005, 22:29:14 UTC

Um, also, I was wondering if you were going to keep Roy tied up constantly. From what I've read about bondage, there is a chance for nerve damage. Then, there's the nagging presence of normal everyday bodily functions: are Ed and Al going to have to assist Roy with everything? I know it's just a story, but you've put quite a bit of realism into it already. My mind's been thinking a lot about poor Roy.

Re: Great follow-up velvet_mace August 15 2005, 23:24:58 UTC

His restraints are not that tight. Just tight enough that he can't fit them over his hands. They are leather and fairly wide with a bit of give and they don't cut off his circulation. His shoulders will get a bit tired from being held back like that, but it's amazing what a body can get used to after a while.

And yes, boy you have the next chapter right there. Roy learning just how helpless he is. I'm so damn cruel with him. Ed and Al will have to help him with EVERYTHING. Grooming, eating, even using the bathroom. He's utterly helpless. Just how Greed wants him.

Re: Great follow-up anonymous August 15 2005, 22:35:45 UTC

I keep forgetting to include everything I want to say.

It's great that you've added Pride and Kimblee to the story. It's added so much story potential (and possible pairings).

One little correction:

Roy read through the report again, scanning through paragraph after paragraph of dry description.

I think you meant:

Hughes read through the report again, scanning through paragraph after paragraph of dry description.

Re: Great follow-up velvet_mace August 15 2005, 23:18:31 UTC

Thanks for catching that. It's fixed. If you catch anything else please tell me. This is unbeta'd and rough at this point.

Re: Great follow-up velvet_mace August 15 2005, 23:19:52 UTC

Yes Pride was required for the plot. Kimblee just made sense, since all the other alchemists are busy elsewhere.

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